trace_ekies
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Recently I was told that my writing is more 'implied' than 'visual'. Will someone please explain what this means.
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Recently I was told that my writing is more 'implied' than 'visual'. Will someone please explain what this means.
... Did it seem to be a complimentary comment? Maybe you could link to the actual comment(?)
[Emphasis is mine.]... quite good. Your writing is more implied than visual though. Maybe a crossover would help? ... I had the feeling that you did not get the feelings of the main protagonist clear enough. like him being nervous with shaking hands. Maby sweaty palms and some confution of why this happens. As he knews his feelings is clear but not know what his sister is feeling at that time. You write pretty good. But I had the feeling I was reading some Lady porn novel. Not that it is bad. But it is not the style I want to go. Really sorry for that. ...
Ohh, I get it. This is about using abstractions where he wants sensory description. That's a common difference between "female" erotica and "male" erotica since men tend to be aroused be direct sensory impressions, while women tend to be aroused more by situations, emotions. Thus why men often prefer visual erotica while women often prefer novel-like erotica. Similarly men aren't always that in contact with their inner feelings and instead even in themselves may focus on surface symptoms as the physical expression of emotions.I had responded to a post on EF looking for someone to edit a story. The story had been written in English by an author whose native language was not English. As a sample I sent him a paragraph of his story recast so as to improve readability, (in my opinion), but endeavoring to maintain his original meaning.
After reading it he sent the following:
[Emphasis is mine.]
Maybe I should have but didn't, take it as criticism. I assumed it was simply a comment about differences in style. However, I don't understand what he meant.
Can you please explain what he was trying to tell me?
... The problem there is that some readers have to be hit over the head with the meaning of gestures/actions more than others before they get it. ....
I have been trying, at least a little bit, to use body language descriptions and dialog structures to convey feelings. Isn't that more visual than implied? Or do I also need to explain those things?
... men tend to be aroused be direct sensory impressions, while women tend to be aroused more by situations, emotions. ...
... it could be that your descriptions are to implied for him because he does not have a firm grip on the language.
That was my first thought but I didn't want to use that as an excuse for disregarding something that might very well be helpful.
The rest of this is spinning wheels and probably not helping you to take charge of your own writing.
If that's the case, the only one who can tell you what he means is him, and he's the one who you should be asking. The rest of this is spinning wheels and probably not helping you to take charge of your own writing.
I have been trying, at least a little bit, to use body language descriptions and dialog structures to convey feelings. Isn't that more visual than implied? Or do I also need to explain those things?