hylas_
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Hey there! I'm looking for an editor for a gay BDSM-themed story.
The story is about a "dumb jock", "dude-bro" type guy. He submits to a sophisticated man who is controlling and has a sadistic streak, but also a kind and nurturing side.
The main gist is that the dominant "takes over" the submissive's life, controlling what he wears, eats, and generally how he spends his days. This arrangement benefits the submissive, since he, if left to his own devices, is a complete fuck-up who can't get his own life in order.
The story moves quite slowly, and I'm currently writing it as an open-ended, multi-chapter piece. The intention is for it to ultimately all form a Novella. But for now, I'm looking for somebody who'd be interested in beta-reading the first chapter, which is 2100 words long.
I'm looking for feedback regarding both grammar and content. English isn't my first language. I'd like to believe it's good enough for me to write an entertaining story, but I do sometimes get some basics wrong, especially punctuation.
Shoot me a line if you're interested, I'd be very thankful!
The story is about a "dumb jock", "dude-bro" type guy. He submits to a sophisticated man who is controlling and has a sadistic streak, but also a kind and nurturing side.
The main gist is that the dominant "takes over" the submissive's life, controlling what he wears, eats, and generally how he spends his days. This arrangement benefits the submissive, since he, if left to his own devices, is a complete fuck-up who can't get his own life in order.
The story moves quite slowly, and I'm currently writing it as an open-ended, multi-chapter piece. The intention is for it to ultimately all form a Novella. But for now, I'm looking for somebody who'd be interested in beta-reading the first chapter, which is 2100 words long.
I'm looking for feedback regarding both grammar and content. English isn't my first language. I'd like to believe it's good enough for me to write an entertaining story, but I do sometimes get some basics wrong, especially punctuation.
Shoot me a line if you're interested, I'd be very thankful!
