epiphany65
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Epiphany65 submitted a poem called 4th Street, Positively, which starts out really pretty well, descriptive and interesting:
my words poured out
like hot coffee
she drank them,
then asked for a refill
But the last three lines of the poem stump me. I don't know whether I'm being a daft thing or what but it was almost like switching the TV channel right at the end of a movie. I understand the sentiment, I just don't understand how it was worded. Otherwise, a fine effort.
Thanks for the kind review. I wrote the poem about my girlfriend, whose name is Lori. So I used the pun on her name with "lorry/truck" and "truck", meaning "to have interaction with". The title is a twist on the title of a Bob Dylan song.