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SheaLima

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• Nov 27, 2013

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Hello. I am new to this site and have been working on my story. It is not done yet, but has close to 11, 000 words. I have sent it to three people expecting to be critiqued. What I got instead were men saying, "yea, it's good. Now lets meet up for sex..." I am not looking to meet anyone for sex or be your submissive. All I want is for someone to honestly tell me how good or bad my story is, and some tips would help. I am from Brazil and just moved to Texas for college. I need work on my English and writing and thought this would be a fun place to do that.
If you would, please help. Just keep in mind that I am not going to sleep with you. Thank you.

 

sr71plt

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• Nov 27, 2013

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What's the topic? Those truly interested most likely want to know what that is.

 

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bikoukumori

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• Nov 27, 2013

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Those guys are stupid. But yea, it would help if you shared what the story is about.

 

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• Nov 29, 2013

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Depending on the category, I'd be willing to look it over and give you feedback.

 

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Pete_L

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• Nov 30, 2013

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Sent you a PM to see if I can help you

 

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SheaLima

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• Dec 1, 2013

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sr71plt said:

What's the topic? Those truly interested most likely want to know what that is.

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It is about my own experiences so far. Thank you.

 

LaRascasse

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• Dec 1, 2013

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SheaLima said:

It is about my own experiences so far. Thank you.

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Specifically, could you post the themes of your story (eg - romance, erotic couplings... whatever) and also the word length?

Most editors would like to know the category and size of your piece in advance.

 

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bikoukumori

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• Dec 3, 2013

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"My own experiences" isn't that helpful.

 

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SheaLima

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• Dec 4, 2013

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bikoukumori said:

"My own experiences" isn't that helpful.

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I am sorry. Umm... first time masturbation, voyeurism, submission... Thank you.

 

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• May 31, 2014

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SheaLima said:

I am sorry. Umm... first time masturbation, voyeurism, submission... Thank you.

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Sounds like a promising story, especially if it is based on your own experiences.

Did you ever post it here on Lit?

 

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I am available for proofing / editorial and general recommendations for anyone else that comes across this thread looking for an editor.

http://www.literotica.com/editors/editorpage.php?uid=2024438

 

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• Jun 1, 2014

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ReynardAyton said:

I am available for proofing / editorial and general recommendations for anyone else that comes across this thread looking for an editor.

http://www.literotica.com/editors/editorpage.php?uid=2024438

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vg27 said:

Sounds like a promising story, especially if it is based on your own experiences.

Did you ever post it here on Lit?

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Hi. I never did submit the story. The story is written, but I am from Brazil, and English is my second language. I am not good at editing and I do not want the mistakes to take away from my story and experiences. Thank you.