Old 08-10-2015, 03:19 PM   #1
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thread the first

one day I sent a scribble to a friend, and he told me it was a poem.

so here I am.

poets don't bite, do they?
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Old 08-10-2015, 04:14 PM   #2
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one day I sent a scribble to a friend, and he told me it was a poem.

so here I am.

poets don't bite, do they?
Only a little. . Welcome to the fray Fairlight.
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Old 08-10-2015, 04:15 PM   #3
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Hello and welcome. Any poets that bite just gum you so relax, write and share.
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mmmm ...... kibble ......
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Old 08-12-2015, 08:04 PM   #6
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Only a little. . Welcome to the fray Fairlight.
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Hello and welcome. Any poets that bite just gum you so relax, write and share.
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mmmm ...... kibble ......
down, boy. *tsk*

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Old 08-12-2015, 08:20 PM   #7
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Oh ..... you said scribble.
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one day I sent a scribble to a friend, and he told me it was a poem.

so here I am.

poets don't bite, do they?
just gently on the very tips after ensuring that they are erect and perked up from all the sucking and licking I am sure y'all enjoy that a lot
WTf is goin' on here tho?


Be happy,

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just gently on the very tips after ensuring that they are erect and perked up from all the sucking and licking I am sure y'all enjoy that a lot
WTf is goin' on here tho?


Be happy,

Cheers
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now go away-- shoo! you're distracting me from writing my Very Serious Poetry about The Yucky Love Stuff.
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you people.

now go away-- shoo! you're distracting me from writing my Very Serious Poetry about The Yucky Love Stuff.
Lol, well I already like your humor, I hope it makes an appearance in your poetry.
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Old 08-16-2015, 02:33 AM   #11
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Lol, well I already like your humor, I hope it makes an appearance in your poetry.
not a chance, sister. it's all rending of garments and gnashing of teeth. this is LOVE we're talking about!
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not a chance, sister. it's all rending of garments and gnashing of teeth. this is LOVE we're talking about!
Really? So THAT's what it's all about. Damn. Need to toss my night guard and buy cheaper clothes!
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Old 08-16-2015, 03:28 AM   #13
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Really? So THAT's what it's all about. Damn. Need to toss my night guard and buy cheaper clothes!
nooo. keep the night guard-- trés sexy. maybe throw in a breathe-right strip as well.
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Old 09-20-2015, 03:58 AM   #14
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A small scribble, off the top of my bedhead, first thing in the morning.



The Misery of Distance

I am so lonely for
His arms around me
His kisses on my lips
His breath on my shoulder
His whispers in my ear

I can almost feel him
Almost taste him
Almost smell him
Almost hear him

...almost.
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Old 09-23-2015, 07:51 PM   #15
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A small scribble, off the top of my bedhead, first thing in the morning.



The Misery of Distance

I am so lonely for
His arms around me
His kisses on my lips
His breath on my shoulder
His whispers in my ear

I can almost feel him
Almost taste him
Almost smell him
Almost hear him

...almost.
Nice, Fairlight. Like the way the title sets up the narrative.

Very musical; not sure I'd add the last "almost." Seems unnecessary.

It might be fun to stretch the imagery here: a café au chocolat in some bistro on the Left Bank in Paris perhaps, not sure if he's going to come?
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Old 11-04-2015, 06:52 AM   #16
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Nice, Fairlight. Like the way the title sets up the narrative.

Very musical; not sure I'd add the last "almost." Seems unnecessary.

It might be fun to stretch the imagery here: a café au chocolat in some bistro on the Left Bank in Paris perhaps, not sure if he's going to come?
thanks for your feedback.
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Old 11-04-2015, 07:10 AM   #17
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if he thinks they've seen my dark and secret places
he's wrong

if he thinks they've heard my whimpered pleading whispers
they haven't

if he thinks they've tasted the salt along my collarbone
or inhaled my cassolette
or stroked my velveteen depths with sweaty, single-minded purpose
it isn't so


if he thinks of me at all
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Old 12-29-2015, 05:25 AM   #18
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you people.
Very Serious Poetry about The Yucky Love Stuff.
Yucky Love: Stuff!
Yucky Love Stuff: Yummy!
Love Stuff? Not so much
Love Love? Do I ever!
Stuff Love? Never
Distracted from Love Stuff? Can I join you?
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...and she's back!
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My prison is a watery grave of tears and you put me here with your tender attentions and your soft caresses and your sweet, sweet words.

Like a cedar-scented siren, you held me in your arms and sang my heart a lullaby, and I didn't see the cage closing round me for the starfish in my eyes.

Then you slipped away from me and through the bars and left me here to drown in my passion and my grief.
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My prison is a watery grave of tears and you put me here with your tender attentions and your soft caresses and your sweet, sweet words.

Like a cedar-scented siren, you held me in your arms and sang my heart a lullaby, and I didn't see the cage closing round me for the starfish in my eyes.

Then you slipped away from me and through the bars and left me here to drown in my passion and my grief.
lovin' the starfish in your eyes phrase - very visual, unique (to this reader, anyway) and perfect for the underwater theme
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lovin' the starfish in your eyes phrase - very visual, unique (to this reader, anyway) and perfect for the underwater theme
Thank you

I wasn't sure if it would seem as tbough I was trying too hard, but I liked it, so I left it.
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Old 07-09-2018, 06:56 PM   #23
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Considering Compromise

I don't care
If you're with someone else
If you're smitten with her
If you don't have room for me in your heart

I'll wait my turn
I'll take the leftovers
I'll settle for room in your bed
Just let me be with you

A desperate plea
A fading hope
An unwelcome truth

The sparkle leaves my eyes
The blush leaves my cheeks
The joy leaves my limbs and my song

Resignation settles in like a thick tule fog
Silencing every cry, every prayer
Every whisper and wish
And it's over
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Old 10-21-2018, 08:03 PM   #24
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Sit just here, my darling
Let me show you my heart

All i need from you is this:
Your eyes watching over me
The gift of your smile
Your hand on my head, caressing my cheek
And your voice calling my name

I don't need you to fix anything
I only need you to be
And to let me be close to you

To kiss your hands, your feet
To lay my head on your shoulder
To feel the blessed breath of the one i adore

Call me to you and i am already there
The golden velvet river of your presence my vision and reward

Don't change the key that your life is written in
Don't change a note
Let me sit, and stay, and listen
And sing you back the heaven you inspire

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