Those are two different issues, and I think the problem of getting it accepted at Literotica is only the technical formatting issue. If it's only the formatting you really need done, you can PM me and I'll provide you an e-mail address to send it to for review and suggestions. If it's the structural problems you want fixed, for a Web site like this, you really need to develop your own writing better before asking for an editor, because you are really asking for a teacher or a cowriter, not the type of editing most here are willing to do for free.
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