Editor for an action packed fight scene?

Charly_M

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This scene is actually part way though a story, but right now it is far and away the best part of the story. Unedited it is about 14 pages long and can stand on its own with some minor tweaks to story structure. I would just like some to do a once over help me clear up any glaring mistakes :)

PS I actually wrote this BEFORE the fight scene in Thor Ragnork came out in theaters.

PPS this story contains some pretty heavy BDSM/noncon content
 
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