LaRascasse
I dream, therefore I am
- Joined
- Jul 1, 2011
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Good writing. You have an engaging story.
In a couple of places you got too cute with it. The Literotica reference is one. It kinda jarred me out of the story for a bit.
The sex was pretty mild which is not necessarily a bad thing, but I don't know that I would call this story erotic.
Overall, you are a really good writer. Keep it up and ignore the trolls.
Thanks. I tried to beef up the sex scenes, but couldn't really get into them beyond the point where they would drag.
What did you think of the characters, main and supporting?