Your striving for a mood and you don't quite pull it off. First paragraph of Hunted
It was cold, and the snow had been falling for hours. I had been walking through the peaceful woods (1), through this snow(2), and it made me feel isolated: alone(3). The walk made me feel as if I was the only one in the world,(4) and for a time that was comforting,(5) the crunch of my knee-high boots on the crust,(6) the snow falling lightly on my dark hair, my coat wrapped around my leggings and a loose top(7).
1 - The construct "I had been walking..." implies to me a "when" and you have no "when". Also "the peaceful woods" implies there is only one peaceful woods. "Some peaceful woods" would have been better
2 - As opposed to some other snow?
3 - I don't like the colon. I'd think a comma would be appropriate
4 - An unneeded comma
5 - The comma should be a period as you are about to change topics
6 - This to me was a non sequitur. Feeling I was the only one in the world was comforting because the crunch of my knee-high boots. I think this section would have worked better after the "walking through the woods" sentence as it a description of walking through the woods
7 - I find "my coat wrapped around my leggings and a loose top" confusing. Is the coat tied around the narrator's waist? What's a "loose top"?