Wedding reception cuck story. Need feed back

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• Apr 13, 2014

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I'm working on a first draft story where the wife hooks up with two men during the reception. Need opinions and proofreading. Not finished with the sex scene yet but just like feedback of what I have so far.

 

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Link

Should I post a link here to the file on google drive?

 

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• Apr 13, 2014

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send it to the yahoo address on my profile. I'll look it over.

 

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https://***************/document/d/1KXzfmtx9aWY4FMVqcIgnTIle-godMkIlK5i1ZUXyLEw/edit?usp=sharing

 

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• Apr 14, 2014

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PM sent.

 

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Thanks. I have fixed punctuation and have started writing the sex scene. Maybe some setup for a sequel. Any feedback from others is once again very welcome.

 

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• Apr 29, 2014

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Done

Story is done. yay.