Editing help

Just had a story bounce. The 4th chapter. I missed some punctuation at the end of sentences with quotes, simple enough.
But I also got a comment back about making your story talk. I have several times that is seems to me the person that is talking is obvious so I did not clutter the story with "she said..he said' every single time?
I have three people in the story. One guy and two girls. One is in charge and the other girl is a sub.
Should I go with every quote is labeled to a person?

Or you could use the person name being spoken to in the dialog. That way the response from that person doesn't need a she said.

I always forget the punctuation in quotes...like always!

It is hard when you have more than two people talking to keep them straight in a conversation without using xxx said after every quote. But then that sounds so redundant after the first few times.

Zeb_Carter said:

Or you could use the person name being spoken to in the dialog. That way the response from that person doesn't need a she said.

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But that can sound unnatural. People don't use the names of people in the room - they just look at them and talk, unless there's emphasis needed.

Usually I'll resort to actions. Example:

Mike stared at Kim. "You can't be serious."

Kim smiled, slowly and wickedly. "Oh, I am. And you can manage it, can't you, Jane."

"I..."

"Of course you can. A whole avocado. You can do it."

Jane whimpered, looking at it. "It's so... big."

"You don't have to eat the pit, dear."

"But..."

Kim put a bottle of ranch dressing on the table.

Mike blanched. "Be serious. A teasooon of that stuff is like 100 calories."

Jane whimpered. "Please..."

When more than two characters are in a discussion, yes, you'll need more frequent speaker tags to keep straight who's saying what.