Emirus
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I’ve just had a story rejected and need the help of an editor experienced with BDSM and Non-Consent. I do NOT need the help of an editor whose qualifications revolve around punctuation, spelling or grammar. I do not need assistance in those areas.
The story revolves around a vile human being who runs all the crime in a medium sized Mississippi town. His first wife ran away, whilst pregnant, because of his abuse and in fear of her life. His second wife died after “accidentally” falling down the stairs. His daughter grows up to be a freelance hitwoman for anyone who will hire her. Her father has fallen foul of some other, more powerful, gangsters who have ordered a hit on him. She takes the job. There is the obligatory sex scene, nothing to do with the main story, to illustrate her personality. She captures her father, who doesn’t realise who she is until she reveals herself at the end of the story. She hires a dungeon and holds him captive there. Nothing happens in that setting that I haven’t read in many other BDSM stories. At the end she naturally dispatches him to hell but not in a luridly detailed, violent or crude way.
A mainstream publisher would IMO accept this story without hesitation. The actual story is, in my unbiased opinion, well written with a well thought out plot. I need someone to help me amend it to a form acceptable without losing the essence or message of the story. It’s the first in a trilogy of stories on a timeline of five days. Al separate stories but with the same “heroine.” Nobody dies in the other stories and everyone has a good time. If this story isn’t published the other two stories are redundant.
The story is 8000 words and if you think you can help please contact me. It may well be is all I need is advice from a writer experienced with that kind of story.
The story revolves around a vile human being who runs all the crime in a medium sized Mississippi town. His first wife ran away, whilst pregnant, because of his abuse and in fear of her life. His second wife died after “accidentally” falling down the stairs. His daughter grows up to be a freelance hitwoman for anyone who will hire her. Her father has fallen foul of some other, more powerful, gangsters who have ordered a hit on him. She takes the job. There is the obligatory sex scene, nothing to do with the main story, to illustrate her personality. She captures her father, who doesn’t realise who she is until she reveals herself at the end of the story. She hires a dungeon and holds him captive there. Nothing happens in that setting that I haven’t read in many other BDSM stories. At the end she naturally dispatches him to hell but not in a luridly detailed, violent or crude way.
A mainstream publisher would IMO accept this story without hesitation. The actual story is, in my unbiased opinion, well written with a well thought out plot. I need someone to help me amend it to a form acceptable without losing the essence or message of the story. It’s the first in a trilogy of stories on a timeline of five days. Al separate stories but with the same “heroine.” Nobody dies in the other stories and everyone has a good time. If this story isn’t published the other two stories are redundant.
The story is 8000 words and if you think you can help please contact me. It may well be is all I need is advice from a writer experienced with that kind of story.