MagicFingers
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Happy New Year!
I started writing this story months ago about two couples.
It is being told from a first person viewpoint. The story teller is married, having a birthday and dinner with another couple who are a friend and a co-worker.
It starts out something like, "It's my birthday. I'm 37 and married and we're out at dinner with a female co-worker and a male friend of mine who is dating her." (Not those words!)
My problem is that later, I have a conversation between the two women in another room from the story-teller. And I want to say what other people are thinking or maybe doing that the teller may not be knowledgeable about.
Is it OK to do that, or when and how is it ever OK to do that?
I really didn't want to change to second person because I'd have to re-write the whole thing. I really screwed up one story with past and present tense in the same story and I don't want to make mistakes like that or this again!
Any insights would be appreciated. Thanks, MF
I started writing this story months ago about two couples.
It is being told from a first person viewpoint. The story teller is married, having a birthday and dinner with another couple who are a friend and a co-worker.
It starts out something like, "It's my birthday. I'm 37 and married and we're out at dinner with a female co-worker and a male friend of mine who is dating her." (Not those words!)
My problem is that later, I have a conversation between the two women in another room from the story-teller. And I want to say what other people are thinking or maybe doing that the teller may not be knowledgeable about.
Is it OK to do that, or when and how is it ever OK to do that?
I really didn't want to change to second person because I'd have to re-write the whole thing. I really screwed up one story with past and present tense in the same story and I don't want to make mistakes like that or this again!
Any insights would be appreciated. Thanks, MF