Feedback on a F/F Arabian Nights story?

I've messaged a much more detailed account of my thoughts on this story, but to sum it up here:

It's very good overall, with a generally well-conceived and tidily paced plot, nicely done homages to 1001 Nights, fun characters, and skillful writing (including some good poems).

Some areas that could be improved include the pacing in the middle, a few minor plot holes, a few typos which make a couple of sentences say the opposite of what's probably meant, and the lack of description.

Perhaps my favorite moment was Adiba's polite, yet wittily mocking letter to the prince.

Edit: actually on second thought, my favorite part has to be the ending. That was exquisite. It resolved the plot and the character arcs for both sets of protagonists in a satisfying way, avoided being a potentially silly 'happier ever after' sort of ending, and featured by far the best poem in the whole story.
 
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