AllTheBetterNamesWereTaken
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- Mar 5, 2017
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Hey hey team.
Have posted stories for a while, but only recently realized there was this forum here (potentially better feedback than the comments section of the main site).
In the interest of improving my storytelling, I was hoping for feedback on my most recent:
https://www.literotica.com/s/magnetism
This ones something of a slow rolling story by the general standards of the site... although I'm not sure how it compares to the others in the Romance section. Mainly character focused.
I'm interested in any sort of criticism on the pacing, characters, etc.
If a sentence sticks out as being awkward, feel free to mention.
Not so interested in Typos- those I should fix, but I don't LEARN anything from having them pointed out.
Be as critical as you like, as long as its constructive. Only way to learn is to have errors pointed out.
... a couple specific things I meant to ask about... but perhaps want to see what people notice on their own before biasing opinions.
Thanks heaps, and if you'd like me to return the favor I'd be happy to.
Have posted stories for a while, but only recently realized there was this forum here (potentially better feedback than the comments section of the main site).
In the interest of improving my storytelling, I was hoping for feedback on my most recent:
https://www.literotica.com/s/magnetism
This ones something of a slow rolling story by the general standards of the site... although I'm not sure how it compares to the others in the Romance section. Mainly character focused.
I'm interested in any sort of criticism on the pacing, characters, etc.
If a sentence sticks out as being awkward, feel free to mention.
Not so interested in Typos- those I should fix, but I don't LEARN anything from having them pointed out.
Be as critical as you like, as long as its constructive. Only way to learn is to have errors pointed out.
... a couple specific things I meant to ask about... but perhaps want to see what people notice on their own before biasing opinions.
Thanks heaps, and if you'd like me to return the favor I'd be happy to.