robertreams
Literotica Guru
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Here is an excerpt from one of my stories. I challenge you to show how it is "bare" or "textbook":
QUOTE: "The lowering dusk paints the sky in hues of gold and scarlet and crimson, mirrored in the black glass of the river's surface. The two young men, their bodies aglow, stand side by side, awed by the miracle, the backs of their hands touching lightly. They return to their fire as night seeps from the river, swallowing them in its starless darkness."
Yes you are almost correct. The selection is terse, precise, saying what it means and nothing else.
QUOTE: "The lowering dusk paints the sky in hues of gold and scarlet and crimson, mirrored in the black glass of the river's surface. The two young men, their bodies aglow, stand side by side, awed by the miracle, the backs of their hands touching lightly. They return to their fire as night seeps from the river, swallowing them in its starless darkness."
Yes you are almost correct. The selection is terse, precise, saying what it means and nothing else.