My story just got posted and it's about incest https://www.literotica.com/s/innocence-29#tabs, please leave constructive comments, Part 2 will be submitted today...
Thanks all
George
Thanks all
George
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My store just got posted and it's about incest https://www.literotica.com/s/innocence-29#tabs, please leave constructive comments, Part 2 will be submitted today...
Thanks all
George
I was 18, young, virgin and totally insecure, no girlfriends. Went to an all boy's high school. A damn sausage fest with a bunch of insecure assholes like myself.
I lived with my mom, dad and 3 sisters. My older sister; she was two years older than I was. But she was very close to me and felt bad that I didn't have enough confidence, so I guess she was hatching up a plan for the summer vacation from college.
I was 18, young, virgin, totally insecure and no girlfriends. Went to an all boy's high school. A damn sausage fest with (for?) a bunch of insecure assholes like myself.
I lived with my mom, dad and 3 sisters. My older sister (deleted ; she) was two years older than I was(me). But she was very close to me and felt bad that I didn't have enough confidence. I knew she was hatching up a plan for the summer vacation from college.
My sister had confided with me that the guy was a clown and that it felt good but she thought it should have been more than that because her girlfriend came and my sister knew that the feeling she got was nowhere close to make her do what her friend did.
You've got a lot of good advice here but I suggest you find a volunteer editor-as rare as a yeti- to help with grammar and punctuation.
After 3 re-reads, I agree with LC that it is not an underage story but I think you get your timelines horribly confused. The way you deal with your sister losing her virginity at 16 is technically not allowed here.
From my distant memories of high school and college, the guys were even more aware of female anatomy and biology than the girls. No boyfriend ever needed an explanation of female pubic hair or periods.
Actually you have to read the story in mind that the characters were actually at least 5 years younger. Use your imagination. I had to bring the story up to comply with Literotica age standards. I'm sure if you read it again. It will make now sense.
Are you saying that you wrote this with the thought that the characters are five years younger than the ages given, that you are inviting the reader to see them that way too, and that you only put the ages in that you did to comply (read fool/circumvent) the Literotica age rule? If so, it should be pulled from the collection. It does read underage to me.[/QUOTE
WOW.. That's pretty harsh.... You feeling threatened...
I know what I wrote..
And don't you ever even think I'm a pedophile. You don't know me, and you should never make those assumptions.
Don't be ignorant.
Are you saying that you wrote this with the thought that the characters are five years younger than the ages given, that you are inviting the reader to see them that way too, and that you only put the ages in that you did to comply (read fool/circumvent) the Literotica age rule? If so, it should be pulled from the collection. It does read underage to me.[/QUOTE
WOW.. That's pretty harsh.... You feeling threatened...
I know what I wrote..
And don't you ever even think I'm a pedophile. You don't know me, and you should never make those assumptions.
Don't be ignorant.
Both posters you've come back at, George, were just reacting to what you yourself posted here.
I asked you to confirm you post wording, which pretty clearly states you fudged the ages just to circumvent the rules here. Are you saying that you didn't mean what you post said--just pretend they are five years younger because I just put those ages in to get past the site rule?
I think you posted an underage story (not pedophile because all of your characters appear to be underage) and have posted that you did and invite readers to think of the characters as five years younger than stated. I've asked you to confirm or deny that. That's what your post implies.
Actually you have to read the story in mind that the characters were actually at least 5 years younger. Use your imagination. I had to bring the story up to comply with Literotica age standards. I'm sure if you read it again. It will make now sense.
Thanks for all the feedback..
Everyone calm down, he's not a pedo, he just wants to write underage stories. BIG DIFFERENCE. . . .
OK.. Guys.... We just need to calm down. Take a deep breath and realize that this is not a world ender. I know what I read, that was deleted from this thread...
I consider this thread closed.....
You haven't stepped away from that statement:
Actually you have to read the story in mind that the characters were actually at least 5 years younger. Use your imagination.
"Posted by: MyRubiLips
On: 06-26-2015 09:09 PMWARNING.. Don't you ever even hint that I'm a pedophile... You don't know me personally. And you are making assumptions.
You and he are the ones trying to go off in a pedophile tangent.
I was making a sarcastic comment .... it's not always all about you sr71plt.
I take it this is you being sarcastic about not being able to convey sarcasm in your last message and blaming someone else for that.