exiled_oblivion
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OK, so I've been lurking here for years. A couple of years back I submitted a story in the Celebrity section called One Horny Redhead, about Alyson Hannigan. I'd written it for myself really, but thought I'd share it with the world in case anyone else found it interesting.
I said at the time that it would not be the last story I wrote about Alyson.
Then work and real life kicked my ass for a while so I never really thought about writing much more until recently.
Anyway, a few months back I started writing another story, again featuring Ms. Hannigan, but this time in a lesbian scenario with her co-star Amber Benson. If you've seen Seasons 4-6 of Buffy The Vampire Slayer you can see where this is going.
I put pen to paper (or fingers to keyboard) with no real planning or intention other than the simple premise of "I want to write something where Aly and Amber are together OFF the set as well as on the set". It kinda snowballed into quite a lengthy story, but I'd like some feedback on the first part before I post the rest; I'm not entirely convinced of a few things:
1. Structure. I write it as I think it; stuff just falls out of my brain and onto the keyboard with very little thought as to structure, plot, or anything else. I just kinda let the story take on a mind of it's own and go where it wants to go. Does it work?
2. I'm a straight male, so obviously have fairly minimal understanding of what goes on in a gay girls' mind. Am I at least in the ballpark?
3. Have I allowed too much of the characters that they play on the show to bleed into my portrayal of them? It's difficult to separate the two when there's not an awful lot of insight into their personality available for public consumption, much less their private lives.
4. Do I need an editor? Part of me just wants to throw this stuff out there and doesn't care if other people would like it written differently (as I said above, I write for myself), but the perfectionist in me wants to do it right and not spoil anyone's enjoyment of the story.
5. There are big gaps (in terms of time) between when I've written various parts of this, so if anyone spots any inconsistencies/continuity errors, please let me know.
Any other feedback is greatly appreciated. Here's the link: Droplet
And for anyone that wants to read the first story I submitted (entirely unrelated to Droplet), here it is: One Horny Redhead
Thanks in advance
I said at the time that it would not be the last story I wrote about Alyson.
Then work and real life kicked my ass for a while so I never really thought about writing much more until recently.
Anyway, a few months back I started writing another story, again featuring Ms. Hannigan, but this time in a lesbian scenario with her co-star Amber Benson. If you've seen Seasons 4-6 of Buffy The Vampire Slayer you can see where this is going.
I put pen to paper (or fingers to keyboard) with no real planning or intention other than the simple premise of "I want to write something where Aly and Amber are together OFF the set as well as on the set". It kinda snowballed into quite a lengthy story, but I'd like some feedback on the first part before I post the rest; I'm not entirely convinced of a few things:
1. Structure. I write it as I think it; stuff just falls out of my brain and onto the keyboard with very little thought as to structure, plot, or anything else. I just kinda let the story take on a mind of it's own and go where it wants to go. Does it work?
2. I'm a straight male, so obviously have fairly minimal understanding of what goes on in a gay girls' mind. Am I at least in the ballpark?
3. Have I allowed too much of the characters that they play on the show to bleed into my portrayal of them? It's difficult to separate the two when there's not an awful lot of insight into their personality available for public consumption, much less their private lives.
4. Do I need an editor? Part of me just wants to throw this stuff out there and doesn't care if other people would like it written differently (as I said above, I write for myself), but the perfectionist in me wants to do it right and not spoil anyone's enjoyment of the story.
5. There are big gaps (in terms of time) between when I've written various parts of this, so if anyone spots any inconsistencies/continuity errors, please let me know.
Any other feedback is greatly appreciated. Here's the link: Droplet
And for anyone that wants to read the first story I submitted (entirely unrelated to Droplet), here it is: One Horny Redhead
Thanks in advance
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