ChasingAnna
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First time submitter.
I've got a fairly long story nearing completion. The first chapter was rejected first attempt and I figured getting a second set of eyes on it would be helpful.
It's largely psychological, non-con/reluctant, focusing on a girl's struggle to escape pursuing males while resisting her own artificially enhanced libido. It's primarily MF, though a few chapters have FF as well. There is one chapter that has a MMF scene though the MM part of that isn't overly explicit.
In addition to general proofreading, I'd be very open to feedback about how effective the prose is at putting you in the head of the girl as she struggles with her situation, her own desires, and guilt about some of her choices.
Major tags: non-con, first time, impregnation, aphrodisiac
I've got a fairly long story nearing completion. The first chapter was rejected first attempt and I figured getting a second set of eyes on it would be helpful.
It's largely psychological, non-con/reluctant, focusing on a girl's struggle to escape pursuing males while resisting her own artificially enhanced libido. It's primarily MF, though a few chapters have FF as well. There is one chapter that has a MMF scene though the MM part of that isn't overly explicit.
In addition to general proofreading, I'd be very open to feedback about how effective the prose is at putting you in the head of the girl as she struggles with her situation, her own desires, and guilt about some of her choices.
Major tags: non-con, first time, impregnation, aphrodisiac