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- Jul 12, 2013
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Hi Guys
I've written a short mother-son incestuous story. Just finished checking it for grammatical errors (on MS word) and it looks fine.
I need help to change the words I have used to suit the scene or to tweak the story here and there as suitable to adjust to the pace. I feel I need an expert writer's advice on this.
Guys, please let me know if you would like to help me out. Pasting last few paragraphs here, hoping it catches your interest.
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"See ya in the evening" she blew a kiss, I couldn't really study all day. I just wanted to see my mom back, though I was supposed not to touch her anytime soon, I was excited even to see her fully clothed.
I was looking out the window, waiting for her car to return, after hours when I finally heard her car, I almost ran to her, I was at her car window with a happy smile when she was about to open the door. Mom was surprised to see me. I kissed on her lips and she reciprocated.
"Honey, what are you doing here?" she smiled, I took her bag as we walked inside the house. Mom slipped the new condom packets into my pocket and whispered, "Now go to your room and study" and slapped on my bottom. She affectionately watched me climb upstairs, she shook her head in disbelief how addicted her son had become to her pussy. She promised herself she would give him herself completely the coming Sunday.
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I've written a short mother-son incestuous story. Just finished checking it for grammatical errors (on MS word) and it looks fine.
I need help to change the words I have used to suit the scene or to tweak the story here and there as suitable to adjust to the pace. I feel I need an expert writer's advice on this.
Guys, please let me know if you would like to help me out. Pasting last few paragraphs here, hoping it catches your interest.
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"See ya in the evening" she blew a kiss, I couldn't really study all day. I just wanted to see my mom back, though I was supposed not to touch her anytime soon, I was excited even to see her fully clothed.
I was looking out the window, waiting for her car to return, after hours when I finally heard her car, I almost ran to her, I was at her car window with a happy smile when she was about to open the door. Mom was surprised to see me. I kissed on her lips and she reciprocated.
"Honey, what are you doing here?" she smiled, I took her bag as we walked inside the house. Mom slipped the new condom packets into my pocket and whispered, "Now go to your room and study" and slapped on my bottom. She affectionately watched me climb upstairs, she shook her head in disbelief how addicted her son had become to her pussy. She promised herself she would give him herself completely the coming Sunday.
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