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Old 12-06-2017, 10:09 PM   #1
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Anagram/Rhyming Couplets Poems

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If at first you don't succeed....skydiving is not for you ....
If you don't pay your exorcist .... do you get repossessed?
I shall always decide not to decide, unless of course I decide to change my mind.
....But I, being poor, have only my dreams, I have spread my dreams under your feet,Tread softly because you tread on my dreams.......
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Old 12-06-2017, 10:09 PM   #2
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1. To taste her nectar, smell it too, perchance,
Puts me in such a state, in fact, a trance.
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Blessed are the cracked for it is they that let in the light
They say a smile is a gift which is free to the giver and precious to the recipient.
But giving the finger is free, too, and I find it more personal and sincere.
If at first you don't succeed....skydiving is not for you ....
If you don't pay your exorcist .... do you get repossessed?
I shall always decide not to decide, unless of course I decide to change my mind.
....But I, being poor, have only my dreams, I have spread my dreams under your feet,Tread softly because you tread on my dreams.......
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Old 12-06-2017, 10:11 PM   #3
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2. If Annie will give me the license,
I'll try to eliminate silence
By changing the spelling to alter
The end of each line coming later.

Not hard if you're kind of a trader,
A dashing and devilish darter,
A wordwright who's kind of a sprinter
With keyboards and three-in-one printers.

But this isn't like minting silver,
More snagging your thumb on a sliver.
That's life for an anagram slinger--
Ear ache from spun puns that still lingers.
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Blessed are the cracked for it is they that let in the light
They say a smile is a gift which is free to the giver and precious to the recipient.
But giving the finger is free, too, and I find it more personal and sincere.
If at first you don't succeed....skydiving is not for you ....
If you don't pay your exorcist .... do you get repossessed?
I shall always decide not to decide, unless of course I decide to change my mind.
....But I, being poor, have only my dreams, I have spread my dreams under your feet,Tread softly because you tread on my dreams.......
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Old 12-06-2017, 10:13 PM   #4
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3. . My dog is the master of all he surveys,
especially the God of settees and chaise.
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Blessed are the cracked for it is they that let in the light
They say a smile is a gift which is free to the giver and precious to the recipient.
But giving the finger is free, too, and I find it more personal and sincere.
If at first you don't succeed....skydiving is not for you ....
If you don't pay your exorcist .... do you get repossessed?
I shall always decide not to decide, unless of course I decide to change my mind.
....But I, being poor, have only my dreams, I have spread my dreams under your feet,Tread softly because you tread on my dreams.......
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Old 12-06-2017, 10:15 PM   #5
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4. Stance as in cricket, bowl maiden over
enacts later skirmishes down in the clover.
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Blessed are the cracked for it is they that let in the light
They say a smile is a gift which is free to the giver and precious to the recipient.
But giving the finger is free, too, and I find it more personal and sincere.
If at first you don't succeed....skydiving is not for you ....
If you don't pay your exorcist .... do you get repossessed?
I shall always decide not to decide, unless of course I decide to change my mind.
....But I, being poor, have only my dreams, I have spread my dreams under your feet,Tread softly because you tread on my dreams.......
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Old 12-06-2017, 10:16 PM   #6
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5. I spy a wry luscious smile in your eye;
it's why I am always curious, I can't lie.
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Blessed are the cracked for it is they that let in the light
They say a smile is a gift which is free to the giver and precious to the recipient.
But giving the finger is free, too, and I find it more personal and sincere.
If at first you don't succeed....skydiving is not for you ....
If you don't pay your exorcist .... do you get repossessed?
I shall always decide not to decide, unless of course I decide to change my mind.
....But I, being poor, have only my dreams, I have spread my dreams under your feet,Tread softly because you tread on my dreams.......
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Old 12-06-2017, 10:19 PM   #7
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6.
If at first things seem limp
There is a stiff art I might primp.

I have to say that once upon a time
To continue a poem and make it rhyme
Stings like hell and drove me mad
But liking, she tells me, making me glad
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Blessed are the cracked for it is they that let in the light
They say a smile is a gift which is free to the giver and precious to the recipient.
But giving the finger is free, too, and I find it more personal and sincere.
If at first you don't succeed....skydiving is not for you ....
If you don't pay your exorcist .... do you get repossessed?
I shall always decide not to decide, unless of course I decide to change my mind.
....But I, being poor, have only my dreams, I have spread my dreams under your feet,Tread softly because you tread on my dreams.......
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Old 12-06-2017, 10:21 PM   #8
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7. Your bras may be oh so pretty
but bars me from exquisite titty.
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Blessed are the cracked for it is they that let in the light
They say a smile is a gift which is free to the giver and precious to the recipient.
But giving the finger is free, too, and I find it more personal and sincere.
If at first you don't succeed....skydiving is not for you ....
If you don't pay your exorcist .... do you get repossessed?
I shall always decide not to decide, unless of course I decide to change my mind.
....But I, being poor, have only my dreams, I have spread my dreams under your feet,Tread softly because you tread on my dreams.......
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Old 12-06-2017, 10:22 PM   #9
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8. When you are out in the direst of weather,
stride out in wellies rather than leather.
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Blessed are the cracked for it is they that let in the light
They say a smile is a gift which is free to the giver and precious to the recipient.
But giving the finger is free, too, and I find it more personal and sincere.
If at first you don't succeed....skydiving is not for you ....
If you don't pay your exorcist .... do you get repossessed?
I shall always decide not to decide, unless of course I decide to change my mind.
....But I, being poor, have only my dreams, I have spread my dreams under your feet,Tread softly because you tread on my dreams.......
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Old 12-06-2017, 10:23 PM   #10
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9. The author clambers through a skree of letters
That reeks of scramble, loose from meaning's fetters.
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They say a smile is a gift which is free to the giver and precious to the recipient.
But giving the finger is free, too, and I find it more personal and sincere.
If at first you don't succeed....skydiving is not for you ....
If you don't pay your exorcist .... do you get repossessed?
I shall always decide not to decide, unless of course I decide to change my mind.
....But I, being poor, have only my dreams, I have spread my dreams under your feet,Tread softly because you tread on my dreams.......
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Old 12-06-2017, 11:35 PM   #11
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3. . My dog is the master of all he surveys,
especially the God of settees and chaise.
Very witty and elegant, but that anagram was way too easy.
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Old 12-06-2017, 11:37 PM   #12
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7. Your bra may be oh so pretty
but bars me from exquisite titty.
Not a legal anagram, methinks.

Also, weren't these poems supposed to be in iambic pentameter? I only see a few that qualify.
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Old 12-07-2017, 09:18 AM   #13
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Not a legal anagram, methinks.

Also, weren't these poems supposed to be in iambic pentameter? I only see a few that qualify.
Typo, my fault. I'll put it right. I didn't say anything about Iambic pentameter because of trying to draw in new members to participate.
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Blessed are the cracked for it is they that let in the light
They say a smile is a gift which is free to the giver and precious to the recipient.
But giving the finger is free, too, and I find it more personal and sincere.
If at first you don't succeed....skydiving is not for you ....
If you don't pay your exorcist .... do you get repossessed?
I shall always decide not to decide, unless of course I decide to change my mind.
....But I, being poor, have only my dreams, I have spread my dreams under your feet,Tread softly because you tread on my dreams.......
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Old 12-07-2017, 03:47 PM   #14
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Sorry I didn't get around to doing your thingy Annie, I meant to but I forgot it finished on the 5th.



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They say a smile is a gift which is free to the giver and precious to the recipient.
But giving the finger is free, too, and I find it more personal and sincere.
If at first you don't succeed....skydiving is not for you ....
If you don't pay your exorcist .... do you get repossessed?
I shall always decide not to decide, unless of course I decide to change my mind.
....But I, being poor, have only my dreams, I have spread my dreams under your feet,Tread softly because you tread on my dreams.......
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5. I spy a wry luscious smile in your eye;
it's why I am always curious, I can't lie.
Can someone help me out here, because I can't see the anagram?
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They say a smile is a gift which is free to the giver and precious to the recipient.
But giving the finger is free, too, and I find it more personal and sincere.
If at first you don't succeed....skydiving is not for you ....
If you don't pay your exorcist .... do you get repossessed?
I shall always decide not to decide, unless of course I decide to change my mind.
....But I, being poor, have only my dreams, I have spread my dreams under your feet,Tread softly because you tread on my dreams.......
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Old 12-07-2017, 07:24 PM   #17
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Never mind, hopefully there'll be other Challenges along soon or you could always start your own
lol I thought of a great challenge the other day but I doubt anyone would like it.

"Try writing a meaningful sentence without the letter T'

I've been playing with that in my head for a couple of days, bloody difficult.

(18 in my message, none here.)

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Old 12-07-2017, 10:57 PM   #18
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You could put it up as a new thread as 'Try writing an American sentence without using the letter T' For how to write one of those see HERE
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They say a smile is a gift which is free to the giver and precious to the recipient.
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If at first you don't succeed....skydiving is not for you ....
If you don't pay your exorcist .... do you get repossessed?
I shall always decide not to decide, unless of course I decide to change my mind.
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You could put it up as a new thread as 'Try writing an American sentence without using the letter T' For how to write one of those see HERE
Never really got into Ginsberg, more of a Burrows or Cassidy fan if I'm reading Beatnik era literature and the poetry from that scene doesn't do much for me not when the 60,s came so soon after with all of its wild creativity and lack of inhibition.

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If you don't pay your exorcist .... do you get repossessed?
I shall always decide not to decide, unless of course I decide to change my mind.
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3. . My dog is the master of all he surveys,
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Tzara?
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1. To taste her nectar, smell it too, perchance,
Puts me in such a state, in fact, a trance.
Because this is perfect iambic pentameter, my guess as to its author would be AlwaysHungry.
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