Originally Posted by Jondom
I donít know what Iím doing wrong. I submitted 2 stories with little dialogue and they were approved.. now the one Iím trying to submit has a lot of dialogue and I keep having it rejected for Ďbreak up your paragraphs and punctuationí etc.
Can someone help me proofread this one story? I can use the structure etc for future stories.
Donít know if it matters, but the story is about a bi threesome.
Pm me please
Not having seen it, it's hard to give advice, but here are a few thoughts that might help based on what you wrote:
1. Each time a different character speaks, start a new paragraph. Don't bunch multiple quotes in the same paragraph. Look at how HeyAll, who responded to you, above, does it in his stories.
2. It is not that hard to learn the basic elements of dialogue, but you have to find a model or some guidelines, review them carefully, and then follow them. Here's an article that was written on Literotica about dialogue: https://www.literotica.com/s/dialogue-this
. It's barely more than one Literotica page long, it won't take much time to read, and it's worth reviewing if you are unsure about how to handle dialogue.