"To keep the review thread clean..."

Tzara said:

I like this one, Ms. Crewe. "Pail" seems wrong, or at least not properly set up. I like the stacked meaning with "pale," but the reader isn't set up for that.

And the close is wonderful, though it makes me think the narrator works in the morgue.

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Sara Crewe said:

Thanks, Tzara. Pail was a typo. I originally had a pail of ice water in there but did some quick editing, switched some things around and never changed the spelling to make the word fit its final spot in the poem.

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Sara Crewe said:

That's stereotyping ya know. Not all psycho-bitches work in morgues, some of us teach your children.

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Sara Crewe said:

Gonzaga almost made people regret they gave them a number three let alone a number two. Gotta love the tournament though...they pulled if off in the end.

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Tzara said:

I was wondering about that. You are a careful writer and that seemed to be an anomaly.

Ah, not mine, unfortunately. Don't have kids. If I did, though, You 'd be a swell teacher. 'Cept for that Canuckian stuff.

Adam Morrison!
He the man.
He's from Spokane.
For now.

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Sara Crewe said:

These are pretty close to 'passion poems' for me. That is, fairly quickly written, with minimal editing so it doesn't surprise me that I messed something up. If I read them over as much as I do for a 'finished' piece they would never get posted because I would cringe and toss them aside into the 'never gonna show the world that' pile. Thanks for pointing out the error or I might have missed it until I went back to edit the poem.

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Sara Crewe said:

What? I could teach them how to spell properly...with u's and everything.

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Sara Crewe said:

He is the man. Is it me or does he look like he should be living in the 70's?

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Gaia_Lorraine said:

Within the Top Lists of stories in LIT each category has a minimum of seven pages, yet the poetry section has a mere two.
Being a mere infant on the bottom rung of the LIT ladder I know not whom to contact to point this out, perhaps one of you guys can?

None of the poems in the Top List has less than a vote of 4.9 yet I have stories of 4.7+ which have attracted over 15,000 readers.

Admittedly, poems are different. But the current structure makes it impossible for new poets/poems to break through and be recognised.

I hope I am not alone

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Tzara said:

It's the mustache. John Holmes, I hate to say, but that's what it reminds me of.

Hey. I gotta beard, but that thin little 'stache thing is, well, weird.

Works OK, I 'spose, if you're an NBA first round pick.

Jes' sink 'em, Adam. All I care about.

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another realm said:

Although I am tempted to let Anna make up my bio, I'm sure it would be much more interesting than reality, I figure I should introduce myself to this little corner of the cyberworld.

A former lover of mine introduced me to literotica.com a few years ago and I would stop in on occasion. About a week ago I decided to come out of lurking and expose myself. For what reason I am still not sure of.

I consider myself a novice poet. A little over a year ago I gave it a whirl for the first time since grade school. I don't write a lot of poetry. Basically this container that is my brain often throws words at me and I try to capture them. Sometimes I do. Sometimes I don't. Occasionally the words capture me.

I have no problem with any level of critique. One can always learn from others. Bring it on. I can take it. I have only posted a few poems here in the forum if you want to take a gander, or a goose, as desired. https://forum.literotica.com/showthread.php?t=412874

My writing styles are all over the place, as are my reading styles. "Eclectic" is my middle name in all of the arts. I am a rabid music lover. I don't spend enough time in nature. Most people think of me as a decent chap and I plan on keeping it that way here. I enjoy online communities in general.

Maybe I should have waited for Anna to make up my bio.

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MistressJett said:

*What you hope to get out of your time at lit (please include level of critique you are looking for)

I do a lot of things at Lit - I can most often be found goofing off in the AH, but I can be serious sometimes. I like to share, read, write and see what makes others tick. Sometimes I enjoy reading a person's stories or poetry more once I've gotten to know them; other times it feels as though their works allow me to get to know 'em.

I can take advice in any form, though I can't guarantee I'll follow unsolicited tips.

*What do you hope to contribute to the poetry community at literotica? What role do you see yourself playing here?

I'm not sure yet - mostly I just lurk around here.

*How would you describe your writing?

Passionate, personal, often fictional but usually steeped in truth.

*URL to your work at lit, personal website etc.

My Lit submissions are here.

*List of some of your favorite poems/stories you have at Lit, in case anyone wants to get a taste of your work

Looking at votes, others seem to like Happy Birthday Ashley (a CD/spanking story) and those lips (a poem written when I was 17).
Personally, my favorites right this moment are Dharma Tramp: Kyle (a hot lesbian hookup story) and Heart on my sleeve (a poem in memory of a lost friend).

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Sex&Death said:

Click here for New, too. A Hello. A thread I began hastily before I thought to check if there was an already established intro thread. My bad.

*What you hope to get out of your time at lit (please include level of critique you are looking for)

I want to write and submit new poems, improve as a poet, contribute to the improvement of others, and commune, cavort, cackle, confess, and conflagrate with poets about poetry, life, the universe and everything.

I am open to all feedback. I grow through challenge and critique, and I love to be analyzed personally and through my work. Others often see my shadow more clearly than I do. I also respond well to stroking.

*What do you hope to contribute to the poetry community at literotica? What role do you see yourself playing here?

I want to contribute poems, ideas, heart, soul, creativity, feedback, critique, analysis, eros and mirth. There are many roles I can play...student, teacher, father, analyst, instigator, community builder, coyote, shaman, warrior, and hedonist, to name a few, but I am simply not into cross-dressing, so you can tease, taunt and seduce, all of which could be enjoyable, but it will not happen!

*How would you describe your writing?

Promising. Hopeful. Rising. Deliberate. Liberating. Optimistic. Loving. Formally informal.

*URL to your work at lit, personal website etc.

See "My Poems" link in sig line.

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annaswirls said:

Just a reminder, if you are wondering what kind of critique a new poet is looking for, you can always check out their roll call information here:

Roll Call


( I started the darn thing and forget to check! )

Thank you reviewers for all your hard work!

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