How do I add detail for the intercourse?

MrSoftRough

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What are the main points for making a good sex scene? What should be the main focus? I'm thinking of adding it into the body parts that are taking action like saying grabbing and groping tits:

"She feels the strong grip and her heart starts racing as he continues to fondle her."

But I got the feeling I'm doing something wrong.
 
Just write what works for you. If it works for you, it probably works for some other people as well. Maybe not a lot of people; but some. However, if you try and please everyone, you'll probably end up pleasing no one.

Good luck.
 
I'd say write the scene, get it all down start to finish, then let it cool a bit and go back to it and flesh it out and embellish it where you think you need it.

For me that works better than letting questions stop me from writing until I have answers. Let it fly then go back and spruce it up, at least that way you're getting the story down.
 
I'd say write the scene, get it all down start to finish, then let it cool a bit and go back to it and flesh it out and embellish it where you think you need it.

For me that works better than letting questions stop me from writing until I have answers. Let it fly then go back and spruce it up, at least that way you're getting the story down.

flesh it out? no pun? :D

i'd also think about the characters' thoughts, emotions, feelings. also, what can they taste, smell, feel? textures...

is she hot and clenching and gasping? she looks into his face as they're joined - what does she see there?

...and stuff.
 
flesh it out? no pun? :D

i'd also think about the characters' thoughts, emotions, feelings. also, what can they taste, smell, feel? textures...

is she hot and clenching and gasping? she looks into his face as they're joined - what does she see there?

...and stuff.

My wife was hot clenching and gasping last night

Because the AC broke, she was hot and gasping because it was over ninety and we were moving the house around and clenching her fist and telling me I better go buy another one and put it in quick!
 
My wife was hot clenching and gasping last night

Because the AC broke, she was hot and gasping because it was over ninety and we were moving the house around and clenching her fist and telling me I better go buy another one and put it in quick!

was the fist wedged in your rectum at the time?

if so, how did it feel, smell, etc? :D
 
You have to decide whether you want to write smut or literature. Personally, I prefer the former.

As for what you write, call on your own experience or on porno movies you might have seen. Some of the latter are pretty off the wall, so use your judgment. Or, read some stories on this site to get some ideas.
 
What are the main points for making a good sex scene? What should be the main focus? I'm thinking of adding it into the body parts that are taking action like saying grabbing and groping tits:

"She feels the strong grip and her heart starts racing as he continues to fondle her."

But I got the feeling I'm doing something wrong.

Your "ear" is trying to tell you that something is missing. It's right. You're missing emotional content.

I'm not going to get into the pitfalls of writing in present tense. It can be done well, it's just harder. You can look at my https://www.literotica.com/s/rent-comes-due for an example. Generally I recommend avoiding present tense. Too much work.

If you're writing for males, you might be able to get by with physical descriptions alone. Maybe. If you want a wider audience, and who doesn't, the leadup to the actual sex scene delivers most of the erotic charge, because it tells about the little symphony of anticipation, doubt, desire, shame and pride most women feel when they are deciding to be sexual. If a woman reader can identify with what the female character is feeling emotionally, then the reader will be aroused by the character's arousal. If the scene is just a laundry list of what gets rubbed and bitten and what consequently races and gets hard and gets wet, that identification doesn't occur.

For an example, look at my https://www.literotica.com/s/getting-dressed-1 . It's very short; but it's currently around 4.65 in terms of score, which means people think it's ok. There's some sex at the end, but three-quarters of it narrates a girl alone, getting ready for a date and reminiscing, and that's the erotic part. The sex scene is just there to close the story, and while I'm sure that's when most readers had their orgasm, it's not the sex scene that had the impact.
 
Make it unique and make it arouse the reader.

But not too unique as it seems a lot of readers get frazzled when you dare to be different so depends if the sex scene is for mass appeal or wanting to write something off the beaten path.
 
Yeah, LC, are you going to go with GA on disrupting threads with blatant juvenile harassment for all of the other users to see? :rolleyes:
 
you're gonna use that somewhere ... at some time - aren't you? :D

I'm sure it will work its way in somewhere. :D

Just today I finally found a way to work in an expression I picked from someone in a story and it went perfectly.

If you're patient and wait it out, the proper scenario always presents itself.
 
On of the most useful articles I've found on the topic was by TheEarl. You can view it here -

https://www.literotica.com/s/writing-quality-sex-scenes

I'm just new to scribbling filth and this article has been quite helpful to me over the last few months.

I find I get it all down on paper first then hack and slash at it until there is just enough left for a reader to put their own imagination to work. I think if you let readers build their own fantasy around the bones of a scene it is intensely more arousing for them. Then sometimes, I'm almost scientific in my dissection of the characters actions so who knows. Ultimately, we are subs to our readers and evolve with their feedback.

My best advice would be to read more filth and let you own style evolve.
 
I write in first person. The detail in the scene depends on what kind of character is doing the narration.
 
Yeah, LC, are you going to go with GA on disrupting threads with blatant juvenile harassment for all of the other users to see? :rolleyes:

okay, now, you started this one.

how are we disrupting the thread? we're having a little convo between the lines, you cry-baby cock-womble. no harm to anyone at all until you stuck your nose in.

now, i know you're gonna respond to this, but i'm not going to give you a reply on this thread. you'll only start with the usual boo-hoo, i'm being harassed.

...again.

and nobody wants to see us going back-and-forth.

but you really are a spunk-trumpet.
 
What are the main points for making a good sex scene? What should be the main focus? I'm thinking of adding it into the body parts that are taking action like saying grabbing and groping tits:

"She feels the strong grip and her heart starts racing as he continues to fondle her."

But I got the feeling I'm doing something wrong.

Read more. Skim for the sex scenes if you want. Read lots of different authors in different categories and see what sounds most like what you're trying to do. Clearly, don't steal another's words, but feel free to borrow from their sense of pacing. A good place to start would be with Hall of Fame stories for each category.

I think most of us try to make the sex scenes valuable to the story instead of gratuitous. By revealing the sex, we're trying to reveal something about the characters, too.
 
Take notes:

If you wanna get near the female mind with regards to sex you must construe sex as she does. For females sex has sundry goals, just like her cooking and attire. Few male writers give a thought to where the sex is going or why, while the female is doing serious mental math for the same event.
 
Take notes:

If you wanna get near the female mind with regards to sex you must construe sex as she does. For females sex has sundry goals, just like her cooking and attire. Few male writers give a thought to where the sex is going or why, while the female is doing serious mental math for the same event.

You are so full of shit your eyes are brown. You're great at stereotypes. Try some real people for a change instead of your regular look at me bullshit that has no value whatsoever.
 
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