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SevenSquared said:
This isn't a criticism, I'm just curious. Would you read a six page story if it was in three chapters of two pages each (maybe on the basis you could read a chapter each day) or would you just not read a story that length at all?
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I normally don't even click on an entry over three Lit. pages (roughly over 11,250) and am not often motivated to even three a three pager. One of my recent ones is six pages, but, as PennLady noted, it's a contest entry so there wasn't much other choice, and it's sectioned. The classic definition of a short story is that it can be read at one sitting. "One sitting" is getting shorter and shorter in the cyberworld, not longer. Beyond that, there's about a 90 percent chance that anything longer than three Lit. pages that's striving to be limited to a short story format is scattered and verbose and in the need of a literary hatchet.
 
But, pilot, we can't all be masters of the one page hot story like you :)
edit - OK two page hot story.

and even if I do like most of your stories, I often wish they were longer. But then I felt the same about Lord of the Rings and other favorite 900 page books ;) so I guess that's not really a good yard stick.
 
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TimothyM said:
oral directly after anal sex
rape as the main theme of the story
anal sex without preparation (especially lack of lube)
guys calling their partners (whether female or male) for bitch or slut - except in a few role play situations or as a rare occurrence in the heat of the moment
too embellished descriptions
virgins or very inexperienced girls / guys who come immediately just by being fucked
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I would add using the “C” word. I’m a bit older these days. Not fond of the word. Not fond of it at all. I think I’ve only used it in one upcoming story and only because the guy’s a complete asshat. It’s his character.

Now, the male virgin going off a bit too easily is realistic. Not so for the girl. I’m sure there have been rare cases, though. I think the fantasy for most men is how well they can please their partner, but some stories do border on the ridiculous. Mine included.

I’d add the drunken date rape to that list. That one sickens me. I have too many young nieces and friend’s kids running around. I cringe at the thought of them having to learn a hard lesson about guys in a pack setting.
 
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TimothyM said:
But, pilot, we can't all be masters of the one page hot story like you :)

and even if I do like most of your stories, I often wish they were longer. But then I felt the same about Lord of the Rings and other favorite 900 page books ;) so I guess that's not really a good yard stick
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Thanks. But I've pretty much moved to two pages here myself, not paying that much attention to writing discipline in erotica.

I think most the time that readers want more, they want it somehow to wind up in a sugar sweet happy ending. I find those ruin a story more often than not, though. "Happy for now" is more realistic if one's got to have happy at the ending.
 
I have never been able to write a story less than three pages and I always feel like I trimmed too much. I use a lot of dialogue, however, even in the sex scenes.

My main problem with long Lit stories isn't the length, it's that they usually are ramblers, or if they are good, bookmarking your spot isn't possible. But a good story should be as long as it needs to be.
 
sr71plt said:
I think most the time that readers want more, they want it somehow to wind up in a sugar sweet happy ending. I find those ruin a story more often than not, though. "Happy for now" is more realistic if one's got to have happy at the ending.
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I agree. Do they want them married in a lovely ceremony with doves singing? Three years later she catches him with the babysitter, but forgives him because she was just too damn hot to resist and they died in their sleep holding hands. Happy for now with a hint at the future is my personal preference.

Also, the “did he knock her up,” obsession. He should have knocked her up. You didn’t mention a contraceptive. He would have knocked her up. I would have knocked her up. Can’t he knock up the entire block while he’s at it?

While humorous, it is a bit perplexing to me. Screaming brats biting my ankles is already a reality. I don’t want fictional characters to have to deal with it. I do have a heart. Sometimes.
 
I guess everything has pretty much been mentioned, but I guess I'll throw mine here (even if it's been covered thoroughly).

Unrealistic stories. Any story that starts to lose it's grip on me because of any sort of unrealistic item within the story. Not to say that fiction should be entirely "true" or not have elements of fantasy, like sci-fi or non human, but you have to write it well enough to make me say "I believe you, I take your word for it because you are supporting your ideas with details I can relate to," or "yes, given those circumstances, I could believe that." You know the whole suspension of disbelief thing. A lot of things that have been listed already ruin this for me. I have to be constantly drawn in to the story.

The porn dialogue in stories makes me laugh. I'm not gonna say that I haven't said my share of "oh yeahs" during sex but c'mon. I don't want to see a story where "OOOOOOOOHH!!!!" is in the sexual dialogue either.

Stories that start with the word "hi." Nope. Back click.

Oh and food. I don't like getting hungry because this buxom blonde is rubbing spaghetti on her jugs. Rare I know, and it is a fetish, just not mine.

... I'm gonna go eat now.
 
luvthedesserts said:
Now, the male virgin going off a bit too easily is realistic./QUOTE]

He was talking about male characters getting off of anal sex the first time.

When male characters are too whiny. A lot of the female writers in GM write male characters like women. And boring women at that. It's also a turn-off when the characters are too small.

There is a tendency from Yaoi to have the bottom character (or 'Uke') be impossibly small and frail. Half of the time in the Japanese Manga, they are only fourteen or fifteen, so this makes sense, but it's hard to suspend belief that there is a five-foot kid who weighs ninety pounds. I mean, they exist, but they show up in GM almost as often as the foot-long cock.

In some cases (see Saichako's 'Slave to love' series) It make's sense. The kid is an alien, or genetically altered (like my own Ladyboys from 'The Bottom Tier') But after a while, tiny guys gets a little creepy, and pedo-ish.

Also, there is a disturbing trend that I've seen. I always get hooked to these series too. They create an interesting fantasy world, and have a few chapters of interesting believable characters, but the chapters are incredibly short, and there is no sex. More often than not, they never finish the stories. I HATE that.

Also, sloppy story, unlikable characters, unrealistic standards of beauty. etc.
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luvthedesserts said:
Now, the male virgin going off a bit too easily is realistic.
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Cruel2BKind said:
He was talking about male characters getting off of anal sex the first time.
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Yep, exactly. No problem with reading about overexcited teenage guys shooting at the least provocation. ;) It's just the G-spot hands-free orgasms that I find ridiculous - especially when both participants are inexperienced.

Thanks Cruel, for showing that my post was legible - and I agree with your points about GM characters too. Though your Tenderness story character Aaron almost fits the description. :)
 
TimothyM said:
Yep, exactly. No problem with reading about overexcited teenage guys shooting at the least provocation. ;) It's just the G-spot hands-free orgasms that I find ridiculous - especially when both participants are inexperienced.

Thanks Cruel, for showing that my post was legible - and I agree with your points about GM characters too. Though your Tenderness story character Aaron almost fits the description. :)
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:(

Aaron was 5'5"...

Or were you talking about interesting characters with no sex? :(
 
TimothyM said:
Yep, exactly. No problem with reading about overexcited teenage guys shooting at the least provocation. ;) It's just the G-spot hands-free orgasms that I find ridiculous - especially when both participants are inexperienced.

Thanks Cruel, for showing that my post was legible - and I agree with your points about GM characters too. Though your Tenderness story character Aaron almost fits the description. :)
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LOL. I wasn’t confused. I was simply adding the “not-so-mythical” male premature ejaculator to the mix. I’ve yet to find them outside the strip club stories while getting a lap dance. But maybe grinding one out isn’t technically premature. I still haven’t seen a story with the guy truly embarrassing himself from the condition. I love a good humorous story.

So, cumming from just his steely gaze is out?
 
I will click right out of a story if it includes a proslug that is defensive about the story content or tells me I'm going to love this wonderful story or begs a vote or a comment, especially because it's in a contest.
 
sr71plt said:
I will click right out of a story if it includes a proslug that is defensive about the story content or tells me I'm going to love this wonderful story or begs a vote or a comment, especially because it's in a contest.
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I appreciate a warning about squick content that I would not expect in some categories, but I do have a problem with vote pandering. I once read a story where the author requested only votes of 5. I was tempted to rain on his parade, but instead gave it a swift back click.
 
Cruel2BKind said:
Not in mind control :D
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I’ve never ventured over to the “mind control” lounge. I would imagine woman making men wash the windows and cooking a gourmet meal while washing their lady’s hair and listening without the hint of distraction, would be popular.

And of course the men’s fantasy: Do me.
 
sr71plt said:
I will click right out of a story if it includes a proslug that is defensive about the story content or tells me I'm going to love this wonderful story or begs a vote or a comment, especially because it's in a contest.
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soflabbwlvr said:
I appreciate a warning about squick content that I would not expect in some categories, but I do have a problem with vote pandering. I once read a story where the author requested only votes of 5. I was tempted to rain on his parade, but instead gave it a swift back click.
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On both of my contest stories, I put something along the lines of, "Wish me luck on the contest!"

Is that too much?
 
Cruel2BKind said:
On both of my contest stories, I put something along the lines of, "Wish me luck on the contest!"

Is that too much?
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I added the comment that my story was in the V-day contest and a vote would be appreciated at the very end. Short attention spans and all. But then again, it is tough to click a star when you’re “preoccupied.”
 
Cruel2BKind said:
On both of my contest stories, I put something along the lines of, "Wish me luck on the contest!"

Is that too much?
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I don't generally read contest stories--or at least, I don't go specifically looking for them. I can see where necessities may be different there than in the case of non-contest stories. Your "wish me luck" is a rather mild request, and I think I would consider that inoffensive.
 
soflabbwlvr said:
I appreciate a warning about squick content that I would not expect in some categories, but I do have a problem with vote pandering. I once read a story where the author requested only votes of 5. I was tempted to rain on his parade, but instead gave it a swift back click.
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I think you're in the majority. I think that readers who can't accept responsibility for themselves and just click out of what they don't want to read and need babysitting really shouldn't be reading on a porn site anyway. But that's just me--and the question, I think, was on personal dislikes. I think a writer shouldn't be posting something they feel they need to be defensive about. They should be savvy enough to know that you can't please all of the readers all of the time (and not be producing pabulum).
 
Cruel2BKind said:
On both of my contest stories, I put something along the lines of, "Wish me luck on the contest!"

Is that too much?
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It would be for me. Because I'm likely a contestant in that contest too. I'd view it as pandering for favortism over someone who bothered to read yours--or at least open it.

I realize that most will not react this way. But, again, the question is on personal turnoffs.
 
luvthedesserts said:
I’ve never ventured over to the “mind control” lounge. I would imagine woman making men wash the windows and cooking a gourmet meal while washing their lady’s hair and listening without the hint of distraction, would be popular.

And of course the men’s fantasy: Do me.
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I have a hunch you would like my story "Compromised". :)

/ Shameless plug
 
sr71plt said:
Nearly every mainstream short story contest has a maximum wordage of no more than 3,500 words, less than a Literotica page. So, you're into verbosity?
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No, I'm into longer stories

I've never been a fan of stories that are basically just one sex scene. When it comes to erotic stories I want well-defined characters, a good background story and then a good sex scene or three. Even two page stories don't always manage to do all that in the allotted space.

I'm not judging those who read and enjoy one-pagers, each to their own.
 
For me the biggest turnoff is writing that lacks craft. I know that all would-be writers have to start somewhere, but if the author can’t get basic things like spelling and grammar right, I’m probably not going to read past the first paragraph.

The second test is the ‘sound’ of the prose. To borrow from Philip Larkin (perhaps after Eddie Condon): ‘As it enters the ear, does it come in like broken glass, or does it come in like honey?’ If it comes in like broken glass (and so much of it does), I’m off to read something else.

And, finally, I must admit to having a penchant for writing that makes me smile.

As you might imagine, with these criteria, I probably start reading 20 stories for every one that I finish.
 
Ironiclaconic said:
I have a hunch you would like my story "Compromised". :)

/ Shameless plug
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Shameless plug accepted. That was a good story. Loved the ending. You had the clueless husband down pretty good and the nagging wife. Though, he was a bit too quick figuring it out to be realistic. It can take a man decades to figure it out sometimes. LOL.

On a side note: You’re doing really well on the contest. Kicked my stories all to hell. Congrats.
 
sr71plt said:
I think you're in the majority. I think that readers who can't accept responsibility for themselves and just click out of what they don't want to read and need babysitting really shouldn't be reading on a porn site anyway. But that's just me--and the question, I think, was on personal dislikes. I think a writer shouldn't be posting something they feel they need to be defensive about. They should be savvy enough to know that you can't please all of the readers all of the time (and not be producing pabulum).
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Babysitting? I'd call it common courtesy. If I'm reading for a particular purpose, assaulting me with unexpected offensive material can get me out of the mood and deflate the experience rather quickly. But if I'm forewarned, it's my choice whether I want to expose myself to it.
 
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