Betty_Rage
Very Slow Writer
- Joined
- Aug 4, 2014
- Posts
- 17
Hi there!
This is my first post in the forum, so apologies if I'm posting in the wrong place/ my format is wrong - I've read some seemingly conflicting information and have been going round in circles of links for a little while. Hopefully though, this is either right, or I'll be forgiven for messing it up!
I started posting on Literotica pretty recently and have so far posted six chapters of my story 'Second Best': each chapter is approximately 1000 words.
The story is about three characters, Steph, Mark and Lilly. Mark and Lilly are primary partners in a long distance relationship. Steph is Mark's secondary partner and the narrator. The drama begins when Steph and Lilly meet for the first time!
The story starts out very vanilla, but after a couple of chapters becomes much more BDSM orientated.
Link to Chapter One.
The main things that I would like advice on are:
But anything else you want to mention please do let me know, I'd love to hear your views!
Thank you for reading this post or my story.
This is my first post in the forum, so apologies if I'm posting in the wrong place/ my format is wrong - I've read some seemingly conflicting information and have been going round in circles of links for a little while. Hopefully though, this is either right, or I'll be forgiven for messing it up!
I started posting on Literotica pretty recently and have so far posted six chapters of my story 'Second Best': each chapter is approximately 1000 words.
The story is about three characters, Steph, Mark and Lilly. Mark and Lilly are primary partners in a long distance relationship. Steph is Mark's secondary partner and the narrator. The drama begins when Steph and Lilly meet for the first time!
The story starts out very vanilla, but after a couple of chapters becomes much more BDSM orientated.
Link to Chapter One.
The main things that I would like advice on are:
- Structure (especially where to cut the chapters, I think this is my biggest problem since I have simply been cutting every 1000-ish words to make the amount of writing feel manageable rather than thinking seriously about the flow of the story)
- Does it feel like a believable story/set of relationships? I'm not trying to write the kind of over-the-top kink 'epic' where you can't go to the bathroom or make a sandwich because your Master said so. I'm aiming for more of a soap opera where the characters just happen to be into BDSM - am I doing that?
- How to write a punchier introduction: my first chapter is by far my most poorly received and I'm guessing its because there isn't enough sex in it? Is there more to it than that?
But anything else you want to mention please do let me know, I'd love to hear your views!
Thank you for reading this post or my story.