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aw shucks, thanks MIC. i love Haiku but it's challenging


Yes, but all modesty aside, you know you did well when you finished it.
I don't write a lot of poetry - of any kind.
And even i felt proud of what I just posted above - in one go; no edit.

And you just inspired me to investigate haiku more.
Thanks!
 
Heart-Shaped and Dripping with Honey

Sometimes, I open that imaginary box,
the one that holds you inside,
reconciling the rise, the release and the fall.

I linger on words, remembering
their shoe strings tied me to the passion,
often so tight I couldn’t breathe.

I’d swoon, not from the lack of oxygen,
but from the honey.
Desire dark and rich,
sticking to everything I touched.

You spoon fed me and I ate every drop.
Warm and heady, I did lust you, goddamn,
you know I did then all the while in silence.
I know you suffered, but secrets like those
kept me yours, briefly as it were, I was.

Only then, I close the box again, inadvertently,
licking my lips, tasting the sweetness clinging
and I cannot help but tremble for you.

i love the rhythm and imagery of your writing.
 
~no cheating allowed~
take all the time you want but start and finish your piece without leaving.
Don't edit either. Seeing your typos is like seeing your underwear when you did not want it to show. All the more delightful.
It must be erotic. Need not be disgusting, but what the hell, why not if that is your cup of tea or coffee.

rules: Don't pull it in from someplace else. Write now and spontaneously combust.

Don't be afraid to be a fool. I know about that stuff.
:devil:

QFT from the very first post.
 
QFT from the very first post.

pardon us mr. doe, however, the passion for the art/craft of writing overtook us. i reserve the right to break the rules in the future because i desire to be punished ;P

Namaste'
 
born from bright ashes
flaming orange-red glow, she seeks
dominant phoenix

oooo did you enjoy that lil spank?
again I stand in awe at your wordplay.

I wonder if it's ok to repost without editing (as I did), if you discover a better word or an error.
 
Rx for a Heart-Shaped Hole

She is honey in a nightmare of bitter
and there is much too much to regret,
none of which is lost in memories.

I'd love out loud if it were possible,
but as awake, I am the same in sleep.
It's not easy to speak, though still,
for a moment I am soothed
with soft sticky lip kisses
giving a slow vein of seduction.

I surrender, accepting bad for her good
but this is when I wake. Sometimes hard
pressed for more, other times further,
in wet sheets. It’s more of
the same pain, tasting love, but not.
 
not a knock to others but addressing a little pet peeve of my own

oh hai


this is not a ku
i can count - five, seven, five
*chucks in a blossom*
 
kind of you to say so :)

short poems are short poems, and it gets under my skin way more than necessary that this whole 5-7-5 thing is considered how to write haiku in the general eye.

more challenging in 3-4-1;)

all is well. skin can crawl if you choose. but feels better not carry the woman when she was already escorted across the puddle
 
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more challenging in 3-4-1;)

yeahhhhhh - beats, syllabic count, no. of lines - but content! it seems to be ignored for the sake of numbers, and emotionally-charged, 'judgemental' words get slung into the mix willy-nilly where they have no place in the form. there's a reason why haiku's considered one of the most difficult forms.
 
kind of you to say so :)

short poems are short poems, and it gets under my skin way more than necessary that this whole 5-7-5 thing is considered how to write haiku in the general eye.

ahh I think I may have missed the irony in your poem - the one I praised. I still praise it, but now appreciate your meaning.
:)
Hiya Sapphi
 
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