ElectricBlue
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Here's the story, autobiographical: https://www.literotica.com/s/memory-and-loss-pt-03That's material for a story right there...
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Here's the story, autobiographical: https://www.literotica.com/s/memory-and-loss-pt-03That's material for a story right there...
That's material for a story right there...
Still taking lessons, to be honest. I think I may have graduated to cello, a more seductive instrument by far.It could be a series:
I Played Her Like An Instrument Ch. 01: Violin
I Played Her Like An Instrument Ch. 02: Saxophone
I Played Her Like An Instrument Ch. 03: Bongo Drums
Etc.
In A Spot of Music she uses his freckled body to write music scores. Played his body like a composer. All based on an actual quote from Scott Beach:I actually think that's a great simile -- the idea of playing a person's body, like an instrument. It's a cliche, but a good one. And yep, that's high praise.
You can play your own piccolo, pal, I'll stick to a body with curves... .A mere fiddle? Feh. Play their body like an orchestra.
I figured that your reference was somewhat more sophisticated than a reference to band camp, but I thought I'd ask.
I actually think that's a great simile -- the idea of playing a person's body, like an instrument. It's a cliche, but a good one. And yep, that's high praise.
It could be a series:
I Played Her Like An Instrument Ch. 01: Violin
I Played Her Like An Instrument Ch. 02: Saxophone
I Played Her Like An Instrument Ch. 03: Bongo Drums
Etc.
The main thing I look for when I read romance stories is a slow build up with a focus on the emotional exchanges and bonds between the characters: tenderness, touching, hugging, kissing, eye contact, etc. I want to see the romance build and unfold more than I what to see the sex scene if that makes sense - to understand and relate to why the characters are having sex beyond the “I’m horny, let’s fuck.”
Kant
If you write the romance story, let me know. I want to read it
That's what distinguishes romances from strokers. Any fetish or perversion can be romantic if the path is long, slow, and tender. It took years for his and the tentacle monster's affection to strengthen and solidify.The main thing I look for when I read romance stories is a slow build up with a focus on the emotional exchanges and bonds between the characters: tenderness, touching, hugging, kissing, eye contact, etc. I want to see the romance build and unfold more than I what to see the sex scene if that makes sense - to understand and relate to why the characters are having sex beyond the “I’m horny, let’s fuck.”
Hi again, everyone. I've finally got the first page of my story written, about 3,700 words.
Would anyone who is familiar with the Romance category be willing to beta-read my beginning and let me know if I've got something worth pursuing? I'd be happy to reciprocate and beta-read something for you in exchange.
Thanks for considering it.
That's the critical factor in romantic writing: time.
I don't know how big I am in the Romance category but I have a couple in the hall of fame. I am happy to give it a beta read if you would like my take on it.
In my well-received real-life middle-aged romance The Botanists the Click! is immediate but the romance takes awhile because 19th century propriety and busy lives.Thanks for that, Hypoxia. It's something I hadn't considered, but will now. My story is going to span about a six month period, but I had planned to set a pretty brisk pace. I'll pay attention and try to strike the right balance.
Made me look.Off on a tangent, I just realized that I put you in my last story! You're the villian!
It seemed like such a quick, breezy idea when it was just in my head, but as the words leach out on to the screen, it just keeps getting longer.
It seemed like such a quick, breezy idea when it was just in my head, but as the words leach out on to the screen, it just keeps getting longer.
Why are a lot of people writing stories using four part sentences? Are they called quadphrase sentences? Is it really one sentence or is it four divided by commas and not full stops. There has to be a technical term for it. I find it develops a rhythm that becomes very irritating in its blandness. Is it a form of poetry and not prose? I guess it demonstrates some skill in writing but the story becomes dominated by it and loses its sense of immediacy. It's like a technical text book style. Does that look of officialness allow the writer more leeway in outrageousness in ascribing to charactors traits that are in real life very rare? To support it a lot of clumsy, unnecessary and often highly sanctimonious verbiage is used. I notice it associated mostly with romance.
There was one yesterday in erotic couplings, still in the latest issue which will be displaced in about an hour.. I don't want to name it but it was 7 pages. I liked the story but the language wasn't easy for me.Examples, please.
There was one yesterday in erotic couplings, still in the latest issue which will be displaced in about an hour.. I don't want to name it but it was 7 pages. I liked the story but the language wasn't easy for me.
I'm really not clear on what you mean. If you don't want to single out the author of the story, could you write a short example of your own?
...As I read a rhythm developed in the language. I thought it strange and I wondered about it. I wondered if some people write poetry and the language they use there extends to their prose. I kind of thought it might be appropriate to romance. I found it difficult to read though.