Old 11-21-2017, 04:21 AM   #1
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Old 11-21-2017, 10:50 AM   #2
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Old 11-27-2017, 03:55 PM   #3
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I'm not an Anal reader so I don't know how Anal readers will react to the story. In terms of writing technique, I thought the story was fine. I didn't notice any grammar errors or typos. You had the story structured well and everything flowed. My main reaction to the story was that I found it so implausible that I couldn't get into it. It's hard for me to imagine the line Sean gave Sister Fulmer working on any woman, let alone a reverend's wife. Sin-eater? Really?
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