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Old 11-24-2017, 12:53 AM   #1
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How do Male Masturbation Scenes...

... in non gay male stories go over?

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Old 11-24-2017, 01:07 AM   #2
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I think it depends on context. What is the guy masturbating to? What's the story category?

I've written some male masturbation scenes that have gone over well, in terms of popularity and ratings, but I've also noticed that in some cases readers may get impatient with masturbation and want things to progress to the next step. I think a lot of it has to do with the expectation that the reader has at the beginning of the story, and whether masturbation will meet or satisfy that expectation.
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I think it depends on context. What is the guy masturbating to? What's the story category?

I've written some male masturbation scenes that have gone over well, in terms of popularity and ratings, but I've also noticed that in some cases readers may get impatient with masturbation and want things to progress to the next step. I think a lot of it has to do with the expectation that the reader has at the beginning of the story, and whether masturbation will meet or satisfy that expectation.
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Non/Con (much more on the reluctant side) where is female student is seducing her professor. The scene would be after the professor turns her down the first time but was obviously tempted.
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Old 11-24-2017, 01:38 AM   #4
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Non/Con (much more on the reluctant side) where is female student is seducing her professor. The scene would be after the professor turns her down the first time but was obviously tempted.
In that scenario, the bulk of your writing would probably be the fantasy in the professor's head while he is masturbating. You might have a little description of the physical act, but the more interesting part would be about what is in his head wishing about what might have happened. At least until he gets to near completion, anyway. :-)
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Old 11-24-2017, 01:55 AM   #5
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In that scenario, the bulk of your writing would probably be the fantasy in the professor's head while he is masturbating. You might have a little description of the physical act, but the more interesting part would be about what is in his head wishing about what might have happened. At least until he gets to near completion, anyway. :-)
Speaking more as a reader than a writer, this is always good advice when approaching a masturbation scenario.

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That is, of course, assuming you are going at it from a point of view that would see into the professor's mind.
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Old 11-24-2017, 03:02 AM   #6
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Old 11-24-2017, 03:03 AM   #7
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Speaking more as a reader than a writer, this is always good advice when approaching a masturbation scenario.

Otherwise...



That is, of course, assuming you are going at it from a point of view that would see into the professor's mind.
God, I love engineering porn. Add a desmodromic valve train to that animation and there isn't a Lit story that could touch it.

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Old 11-24-2017, 04:35 AM   #8
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Soma 99, I think such a scene could go over well. Im very interested in the idea of switching gender roles and feel that having the woman being the one looking and the male being the one being looked at does that, particularly if the woman was the one instigating the action. However, I would prefer the opposite of what guffmut wrote. I would be most interested in what is going on in the womans head and what she sees. As I have written in my two threads on this board I like where the female and her feelings and desires are the focus of the story.

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Old 11-24-2017, 06:53 PM   #10
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I had one in my entry for this years National Nude Day contest, 'The Flume at Falcon Rock.' The story is 1st person, narrated by the male main character. Hes alone with a friend of his younger sister, a woman who later in life is unleashing her own formerly repressed sexuality. I intended the scene to be an unexpected take on what normally might be a first step between much younger characters when they have concerns about an unwanted pregnancy and/or the woman doesnt want to have sex that early in the relationship.

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After getting aroused by their unplanned session of viewing online erotica in her home, the female main character admits she needs to get off. The MMC offers to leave so she can have some privacy to frig herself, but she demands that he stay and watch. Hes doubly surprised afterward when she proposes that he masturbate in front of her clarifying that she has no intention of touching him, just watching. He states that hes never done it in front of a woman hes never had sex with, but she insists. He reveals his inner thoughts to the reader: a combination of surprise, discomfort, and intense arousal as he strokes himself to completion while she verbally and visually teases him enjoying the newfound sexual power she has over a man and the satisfaction of having him off-balance emotionally.
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Soma 99, I think such a scene could go over well. Im very interested in the idea of switching gender roles and feel that having the woman being the one looking and the male being the one being looked at does that, particularly if the woman was the one instigating the action. However, I would prefer the opposite of what guffmut wrote. I would be most interested in what is going on in the womans head and what she sees. As I have written in my two threads on this board I like where the female and her feelings and desires are the focus of the story.

This story

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is an account of male arousal (it's experimental writing) - several women have commented they found it a fascinating insight into the way male arousal works (this male, at least, I don't claim to be representative); also how... satisfying... they found it.

Part of their response was the opportunity to "see" the man.
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There was a recent post about a story where a guy in an English pub was masturbating while fantasizing over some of the other patrons. I thought the concept of male public masturbation in that context went over well. A writer would have to work hard to keep the creepy raincoat flasher/potential rapist or sex offender stuff out of the story, but it could be done and be well received. Or at least I think it would.

I've also thought that public fondling would be an interesting story to write. A sort of CFNM situation where females fondled the male to keep him excited but not letting him cum and doing this while in public or at a all female party or something similar. His whole being would be centered on getting past the edging and cumming. I don't read CFNM stories as a rule so I don't know if this has been done or not. It's just an idea as an extension of the above and the writer would have to incorporate some bondage elements to keep the male from masturbating to climax on his own.
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There was a recent post about a story where a guy in an English pub was masturbating while fantasizing over some of the other patrons. I thought the concept of male public masturbation in that context went over well. A writer would have to work hard to keep the creepy raincoat flasher/potential rapist or sex offender stuff out of the story, but it could be done and be well received. Or at least I think it would.
This one, I think:

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One of my stories had the male character jerking off into the protagonists panties while they were skyping. I kind of liked that one.
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.....I've also thought that public fondling would be an interesting story to write. A sort of CFNM situation where females fondled the male to keep him excited but not letting him cum and doing this while in public or at a all female party or something similar. His whole being would be centered on getting past the edging and cumming. I don't read CFNM stories as a rule so I don't know if this has been done or not. It's just an idea as an extension of the above and the writer would have to incorporate some bondage elements to keep the male from masturbating to climax on his own.
Lol. Well, speaking as the fondler rather than as the fondlee, it's certainly fun to do that and not get caught or seen. The nervousness about being spotted works far better than bondage at keeping the fondlee from doing anything much. Don't know about as a story but I'm sure it has. You've given me a great idea for the story I'm working on now. Thanks a gazillion - Tiffany is about to tease her boss right in front of her husband without her husband noticing .... in the middle of a party. Ohhhhhh. Going to have to write this one in my head for now. Or in the car on the way home but I better not distract the driver to much....
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I think it can work as long as it doesn't finish into a potted plant
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Thank you all for the feedback! If any guys want to send me a few key descriptors you think I should use I wouldn't be mad at ya!
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Thank you all for the feedback! If any guys want to send me a few key descriptors you think I should use I wouldn't be mad at ya!
Well, just one helpful hint I can think of as a guy...

Take a long look at your avatar. That's the fantasy, now make it not quite cum true.
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In a romance novel I've seen a non-detailed male masturbation scene where the major focus was that the male could not stop thinking about whatever scene he'd observed the female in earlier. (For good romantic reasons, like either she had been very enthusiastic about something, or done something impressive, or he had rescued her and it had been the first time in quite a while that he had held a woman in his arms...) This kind of scene can be quite popular in a romance because it details how hard the hero is falling for the heroine.
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Being nonstandard, I'd aim toward something less vanilla than a ho-hum-he's-wanking bit, although that could fit into small corners of a tale. How about:

* He fantasizes and wanks. He spurts out... something exotic. It condenses into... someone erotic. Variants: He's either a 'normal' guy in a unique event, or he's a demon (does he know it?) or wizard and his cum radiates POWER, taking the form of whom- or what-ever he wants. If he's 'normal', he cums a succubus. Or incubus, if he's so inclined. Or both. If he's an unaware demon in human form, he breaks loose. If he's a wizard, it's yet another game.

* He's self-abosrbed and wanks to his naked image in cascading mirrors. To his shock, the cascading images all move and wank to their own rhythms. Some turn female or dickgirl. For the money shot, they all turn and spurt-squirt on the subject. Materialized bukkake!

* There's the old one where he and she are on facing balconies and they wank to each other. If the story is guy-centric, she occasionally invites GFs to wank with her, putting on a show. If gal-centric, he invites buddies to perform. For a twist, the guy and gal perform for each other over time, continuing through adulthood to their old age. No, they never meet.

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* Twist on the stop-or-you'll-go-blind trope: Guy's vision starts to fail. Radical ophthalmologists tell him the only treatment (because science) is to remove semen from his body rapidly. This requires ejaculations as often as possible. His relatives won't blow him constantly so he's in total jerkoff mode 24/7. Does he start running out of fantasy targets?

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Non/Con (much more on the reluctant side) where is female student is seducing her professor. The scene would be after the professor turns her down the first time but was obviously tempted.
I think the scene could definitely work in this context.

For me, masturbation scenes (male or female) can be particularly erotic when the writer focuses on what the character is thinking about as he/she gets off. Focus on the taboo desires of the professor for the student and this could be a good read. Scenes like this are often helpful for building a sense of anticipation.
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Lol. Well, speaking as the fondler rather than as the fondlee, it's certainly fun to do that and not get caught or seen. The nervousness about being spotted works far better than bondage at keeping the fondlee from doing anything much. Don't know about as a story but I'm sure it has. You've given me a great idea for the story I'm working on now. Thanks a gazillion - Tiffany is about to tease her boss right in front of her husband without her husband noticing .... in the middle of a party. Ohhhhhh. Going to have to write this one in my head for now. Or in the car on the way home but I better not distract the driver to much....
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