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Old 08-09-2013, 09:27 PM   #76
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Double, double, boil and bubble
Pantoums are way too much trouble.
Free verse is the way to go
Partick Carrington told me so.
Forms are fun once in a while
and UnderYourSpells's do make us smile
but formative poetry cramps one's style.
*makes a rude Raspberry noise*
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They say a smile is a gift which is free to the giver and precious to the recipient.
But giving the finger is free, too, and I find it more personal and sincere.
If at first you don't succeed....skydiving is not for you ....
If you don't pay your exorcist .... do you get repossessed?
I shall always decide not to decide, unless of course I decide to change my mind.
....But I, being poor, have only my dreams, I have spread my dreams under your feet,Tread softly because you tread on my dreams.......
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Old 08-09-2013, 09:43 PM   #77
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If you're buying I'll have a gin
Of course I'm buying. I'm assuming gin and tonic. Double?

<interesting aside: G&T glows a nice neon mauve colour under black light (UV). Apparently it's the quinine in the tonic. Further study required ... >

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Old 08-09-2013, 09:49 PM   #78
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Double, double, boil and bubble
Pantoums are way too much trouble.
Free verse is the way to go
Partick Carrington told me so.
Forms are fun once in a while
and UnderYourSpells's do make us smile
but formative poetry cramps one's style.
I'm writing a treatise "How to Survive the Pantoum Apocalypse without an Assault Rifle". (Canadian eh!).

Where is Squire Carrington?

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Old 08-09-2013, 10:23 PM   #79
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Of course I'm buying. I'm assuming gin and tonic. Double?

<interesting aside: G&T glows a nice neon mauve colour under black light (UV). Apparently it's the quinine in the tonic. Further study required ... >

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Nooooooooooo tonic I hate the stuff but if you must put something in it lemonade will suffice
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Blessed are the cracked for it is they that let in the light
They say a smile is a gift which is free to the giver and precious to the recipient.
But giving the finger is free, too, and I find it more personal and sincere.
If at first you don't succeed....skydiving is not for you ....
If you don't pay your exorcist .... do you get repossessed?
I shall always decide not to decide, unless of course I decide to change my mind.
....But I, being poor, have only my dreams, I have spread my dreams under your feet,Tread softly because you tread on my dreams.......
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Old 08-09-2013, 11:35 PM   #80
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Old 08-10-2013, 02:29 AM   #81
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I'm writing a treatise "How to Survive the Pantoum Apocalypse without an Assault Rifle". (Canadian eh!).

Where is Squire Carrington?

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I'm guessing you'll be hoarding wood and whiskey for the next few months... October usually means snow here and I can't see any survival of any sort of apocalypse happening without these basics, especially a pantoum one.
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Old 08-10-2013, 07:39 AM   #82
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Pantoum Invasion Hits Porn Site!
Authorities Alarmed!


Something in the water perhaps. Best stick to beverages with antiseptic properties ... like whiskey. Make mine a double.

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Old 08-10-2013, 09:53 AM   #83
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Tristess2 has posted her own pantoum, join the other dark side try to write one of your own
Oiiiiiiiiiii!! Are you calling me the dark side?!
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Blessed are the cracked for it is they that let in the light
They say a smile is a gift which is free to the giver and precious to the recipient.
But giving the finger is free, too, and I find it more personal and sincere.
If at first you don't succeed....skydiving is not for you ....
If you don't pay your exorcist .... do you get repossessed?
I shall always decide not to decide, unless of course I decide to change my mind.
....But I, being poor, have only my dreams, I have spread my dreams under your feet,Tread softly because you tread on my dreams.......
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Old 08-10-2013, 10:03 AM   #84
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Oiiiiiiiiiii!! Are you calling me the dark side?!
With all the spankings you dish out maybe I was more referring to the so called dark side of modern poetry that dirty word.......FORMS haha. Since I literally know stuff all about poetry bar what I have read and done here I wouldn't know, it just seems the common opinion. I am happy learning and reading anything at the moment Teach
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Old 08-16-2013, 03:34 PM   #85
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I think this belongs in here. (I do miss flyguy so much)

A necklace of thighs
and sighs
twisted
about my jaw
like knuckles in my hair...

Thighs that glide on
bristled jaw and
catch lashes in
passing.
Smiles follow hollow knees
bending bony and gone
too soon.

Topographic
one-road map
guides my tongue
to a curling wood.
Skin-blind driver leans
hard into the curve
while copilot
shrieks directions.

The navigator takes charge and
valleys parch as hills scorch
in the arid heat of
that rough and tumble drive.
Gripping slick sheets of
sweating skin we take the
downhill run free
of restraint.
No brakes, no breaks just
panting, laughing joy.

The precipice looms, railed
by frail expectations.
Careening ride tears
steel from post, splinters
resistance in a glittering shower
of eyelid sparks. Freefall,
tumbling,
wheeling through lush
space, she collides
with the feather-soft
cushion of a rented room.

Feathers fly free of fabric
like fireworks or
falling snow.
Oblivious, the lovers lie
curled in blissful bonds
as layers of down settle
covering their love.
"There goes the damage deposit"
He sighs.
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Old 08-16-2013, 03:48 PM   #86
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Omg....
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Old 08-18-2013, 02:51 PM   #87
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Omg....
I'd like to tinker but my partner in crime is MIA, and I won't without his approval.
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Old 09-02-2013, 05:55 PM   #88
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Jakob Speaks

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I mix the ink

It is a recipe
as old as Ægypt
henna from Morocco
for a gently fading stain
Indian ink from China
for temporary depth
and Thracian gall
to enflame the skin
beneath the pen
so for a while
even in darkness
I can trace the lines of symbols

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Old 09-02-2013, 06:42 PM   #89
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Old 09-18-2013, 09:09 AM   #90
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*sibilant seduction*

a glance compromises the senses,
promises silently spoken,
time stills, snakes sinuously
you realise
how soft
how smooth
how sensual she is
sinking in silken thrall

skins surface, exquisite as
polished glass,
organic obsidian
seduces the fingertips
a single stroke causes
shivering sexuality,
to trace her flesh
is to be lost in lust

slowly slip, slide down her spine
her side, her thighs
deep stare penetrates her eyes
sensitive strokes on carnal instincts,
circles, spheres, Ovals
her cries and sighs mine to prize.
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Old 09-18-2013, 01:49 PM   #91
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*sibilant seduction*

a glance compromises the senses,
promises silently spoken,
time stills, snakes sinuously
you realise
how soft
how smooth
how sensual she is
sinking in silken thrall

skins surface, exquisite as
polished glass,
organic obsidian
seduces the fingertips
a single stroke causes
shivering sexuality,
to trace her flesh
is to be lost in lust

slowly slip, slide down her spine
her side, her thighs
deep stare penetrates her eyes
sensitive strokes on carnal instincts,
circles, spheres, Ovals
her cries and sighs mine to prize.
I challenge you to read that without swallowing and not dribbling
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They say a smile is a gift which is free to the giver and precious to the recipient.
But giving the finger is free, too, and I find it more personal and sincere.
If at first you don't succeed....skydiving is not for you ....
If you don't pay your exorcist .... do you get repossessed?
I shall always decide not to decide, unless of course I decide to change my mind.
....But I, being poor, have only my dreams, I have spread my dreams under your feet,Tread softly because you tread on my dreams.......
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Old 09-18-2013, 03:04 PM   #92
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*sibilant seduction*

a glance compromises the senses,
promises silently spoken,
time stills, snakes sinuously
you realise
how soft
how smooth
how sensual she is
sinking in silken thrall

skins surface, exquisite as
polished glass,
organic obsidian
seduces the fingertips
a single stroke causes
shivering sexuality,
to trace her flesh
is to be lost in lust

slowly slip, slide down her spine
her side, her thighs
deep stare penetrates her eyes
sensitive strokes on carnal instincts,
circles, spheres, Ovals
her cries and sighs mine to prize.
This one's a keeper.
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Old 09-18-2013, 04:15 PM   #93
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I challenge you to read that without swallowing and not dribbling
hahaha, you forgot to add with a lisp, whilst drinking water
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Old 09-18-2013, 06:32 PM   #94
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hahaha, you forgot to add with a lisp, whilst drinking water
I did think about the lisp lol
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They say a smile is a gift which is free to the giver and precious to the recipient.
But giving the finger is free, too, and I find it more personal and sincere.
If at first you don't succeed....skydiving is not for you ....
If you don't pay your exorcist .... do you get repossessed?
I shall always decide not to decide, unless of course I decide to change my mind.
....But I, being poor, have only my dreams, I have spread my dreams under your feet,Tread softly because you tread on my dreams.......
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Old 02-19-2014, 04:53 AM   #95
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Goosebumps raise little erections of
hair follicles as breath touches
softly at the nape of your neck
shiver of nerve reaction
lavender scented, satin doll softness
hands grip your wrists
fingers mould in delicate peach
take the shape of fingerprint forensics
purple hue of lovers bruises
to bloom tomorrow
teeth sink into bliss tasting flesh
tease and kiss
slide and glide to the line of jaw
lips mash together gentle
abandoned in twirl of
unplanned exploration
clothes discarded like so much
windblown nothing

hip bones fit my hands
a Patrick Swayze moment,
the lift
legs flung round
pelvis ground wet patch
tanned hue of summers touch
skin gilded in golden tones
muffle my mouth with the taste of you
deafen my ears with your joy
coat my fingers in paint so I may
trace my name upon your thighs
treat me with rapture in your eyes
watch the rise and fall of mounded breast
your gasps and breath heave from your chest
test my linguistics and tongue dexterity
as we chase the race for running water
my hands knead and need the feel
of calf muscle tense, toes pointed
dancing invisible high heels
running in mid air, hands in my hair
God's name on your lips
face red as molten metal
the clench and tense of vibrating fury
hold the pace the line of sight
you start to fight the pleasure intense
overpowers all sense of reason
with uncontrolled abandon you boil over
the taste of you better than any chocolate

I cup the rise of pubic cleft let you feel
my appreciation as you rest
my palm hot on panty tanned lines
your hands run up and over
caressing yourself as if to ease and settle
the sensations running through every
nerve
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