Oneofthetwelve wrote some great stories.
He disabled story comments & doesn't allow private IMs, so thought I'd check here to see if anyone knows where he disappeared to.
I like his story, Pam & Thomas' Erotic Journey.
It's about a Christian couple working in a Bible college that fall in love, & in bed.
I particularly like how he describes the man taking his gal's virginity:
"....He pulled the zipper down again slowly revealing more soft white skin then discovered a white undergarment it was a stiff satin corset. When the zipper was all the way down Thomas put his hands on her neck and shoulders, softly touching and stroking then he slid the dress off one shoulder at a time. The dress slid down to her waist were it fell then to the floor.
Pam was standing before him in her white satin corset, panties, garters and stockings. Thomas put one arm around the small of her back; turning her and pulling her to him then with the other arm reached under her bottom and lifted her petite body into his strong arms.
Somehow they were lying on the bed together and she lifted her hips up as he slipped her satin panties off.
Thomas was caressing her clitoris and the soft folds of her womanhood and took Pam's hand placing it on his hardness. Pam started stroking it through the fabric exploring its length. So he put her other hand on his belt buckle and helped her with his zipper.
It was huge and hot to touch then she kissed it and put it in her mouth. It tasted hot and sticky then Thomas moved positioning himself between her legs.
Pam was beautiful in her virginal white corset and stockings. He loved her and needed her so much so pushing he entered her. She was crying and saying that she loved him as he moved deep into her. Thomas told her that he loved her, then spent his passion in her filling her womb...."
While it's a very tenderly told Christian love story, Pam was a virgin, so likely Thomas needed to enter her sweet Christian pussy very slowly. To help reduce her nervousness, could see him telling her how much he loved & cared for her as he slowly slid it in.
Where is her conflicted feelings about having sex with him before marriage?
Don't Christian girls usually block their man as he tries to move his penis in?
It would've been good to see some dialogue where she tries to preserve her Christian virginity & blocks his penis with her hands just as he's about to move it in...
Pam seemed "too easy" for a "Christian" girl in the story.
Perhaps Pam could've told Thomas, "Thomas, I love you but I'm a Christian and a virgin who doesn't give myself to guys before marriage or an engagement ring. But you, I love you and want to make you happy.... So, please make love to me..."
Where is the description of him puncturing her hymen, that final step of a Christian maiden entering womanhood?
Imagine it stung as his forehead burst her innocence.
It would be really romantic if, as he entered, he "paused" his forehead on her hymen. He stopped & didn't go farther, but looked deeply into her loving Christian eyes & told her he loved her and maybe even asked her if she was "certain" she wanted to go this far.
"There will be no turning back for us ... I will love and respect you either way."
She gazes into his eyes and without warning, moves her abdomen toward him, forcing his forehead to pierce her hymen, making it clear to him she wants him.
His penis pushes deeper and despite the pain, she lovingly accepts him and holds him tight, praying throughout the event that she will survive his carnal thrusts and not hurt too much.
His entering and thrustings did seem a bit too short. The writer reports he "spent his passion" in filling her Christian womb shortly after he entered.
I get he's likely inexperienced, though not likely a virgin, so he should know better to keep his thrusts slow so he doesn't cum too quickly. In their first lovemaking, Thomas cheated his future bride out of immense pleasure by cumming too quickly.