Editor needed for a story about gender-bending
Hey there! I've written an erotic story which is more complex than anything I've written so far. I would like to bounce it off somebody and get some feedback before publishing it.
The story is almost 4000 words long, and the main themes are gender-bending, male submission, bisexuality, and interracial sex. The main character is an obnoxious white young man who one day wakes up with a vagina. The story then follows the erotic adventures he has in this new state with both women and men, and how he learns humility in the process.
My main concerns are:
- Is the story comprehensible?
- Large paragraphs are non-erotic. Are those paragraphs interesting enough?
- Is the story offensive? (To women, transgendered people, people of african heritage)
- And, ultimately, is the story any good?
I would also appreciate some "general editing", in terms of language, style, grammar, and such. English is not my first language, but I'm quite confident about my basic language skills.
I'm in no hurry with this, as I'm simultaniously working on various stories.
Let me know if you're interested! Thanks!
Last edited by hylas_ : 09-25-2013 at 01:57 PM.