Go Back   Literotica Discussion Board > Main Literotica Forums > Authors' Hangout

Reply
 
Thread Tools

Old 03-19-2013, 10:07 PM   #26
JAMESBJOHNSON
TRAILER TRASH KING.
 
JAMESBJOHNSON's Avatar
 
JAMESBJOHNSON is offline
Join Date: Aug 2007
Location: BAD SIDE OF TOWN
Posts: 46,465
Quote:
Originally Posted by JackLuis View Post
Oh, sorry if I bored you snitless.
I never said such a thang. I got you gnawing on one ankle, and my female fans biting my other ankle for more of my trash.
__________________
Soft bigotry; its not what we like but its what we want.
  Reply With Quote

Old 03-19-2013, 10:11 PM   #27
sr71plt
Literotica Guru
 
sr71plt's Avatar
 
sr71plt is online now
Join Date: Jul 2006
Location: Mid-Atlantic, USA
Posts: 34,734
It can be tough to actually be a writer rather than just talking about being one, can't it, JBJ?
__________________
______________________
  Reply With Quote

Old 03-20-2013, 01:39 PM   #28
JackLuis
Literotica Guru
 
JackLuis's Avatar
 
JackLuis is offline
Join Date: Sep 2008
Location: La La Calif
Posts: 7,335
Jimmy, I checked out your comments and the paragraphs you edited.

You removed a lot of words and I guess to a Hemingway your 'improvement' would make sense. However then they wouldn't be my paragraphs, filled with concepts that expand the mind far beyond the simple text, allowing the reader to grasp the full texture of my intent.

But, did you read all the story or just the first paragraphs?
Quick, without looking.

Tell me what a Smushie is?

Or why Rachel was teasing Lee in #2?

Or in #3/4 Why was Jodie so horny?

Can't? You didn't read the stories, you just are picking at me.

I don't think you can judge a story from the first paragraph, even though it is very important, it is not the whole story and one chapter is not the whole of the the creation.
This is particularly true in my Horny Springs saga. I launched it as a soap opera, each chapter is building to a climax, of the story. Lester cums along the way enough to fill a Bell jar.

Also each chapter was an experiment with different things. #'s 1&2 were just Romances. To set the stage for the characters, explain the story's terrain and hint of things to cum. :

#'s 3, 4,& 5 are where the rubber meets the... Well the good parts. Chapter 6 is back to romance. I doubt Poppa would do it my way, but then he wasn't trying to do what I am doing.

Now I'm not saying that EVERYONE has to do the same, in fact we shouldn't copy another's style exactly. We should all write our own stories in our own fashion. Diversity is good Jimmy.
__________________
JackLuis-

Here My Stories

The Horny Springs Saga continues.

My New Best Friend, for our VE's


Fiction writers are just liars with typing skills.
  Reply With Quote

Old 03-20-2013, 01:43 PM   #29
Tio_Narratore
Everybody Party!
 
Tio_Narratore's Avatar
 
Tio_Narratore is offline
Join Date: Dec 2008
Location: North
Posts: 41,817
Jim tried that with me too. Imagine!
__________________
Link to my stories...

http://www.literotica.com/stories/me...ge=submissions
  Reply With Quote

Old 03-20-2013, 02:14 PM   #30
JAMESBJOHNSON
TRAILER TRASH KING.
 
JAMESBJOHNSON's Avatar
 
JAMESBJOHNSON is offline
Join Date: Aug 2007
Location: BAD SIDE OF TOWN
Posts: 46,465
Quote:
Originally Posted by Tio_Narratore View Post
Jim tried that with me too. Imagine!
You needed it bad, like an enema.
__________________
Soft bigotry; its not what we like but its what we want.
  Reply With Quote

Old 03-20-2013, 02:17 PM   #31
Tio_Narratore
Everybody Party!
 
Tio_Narratore's Avatar
 
Tio_Narratore is offline
Join Date: Dec 2008
Location: North
Posts: 41,817
Quote:
Originally Posted by JAMESBJOHNSON View Post
You needed it bad, like an enema.
Only to get rid of that crap bit of run-on awkwardness you offered as an "improvement."

You do know what unsolicited advice is worth, don't you, Jimbo?
__________________
Link to my stories...

http://www.literotica.com/stories/me...ge=submissions
  Reply With Quote

Old 03-20-2013, 02:43 PM   #32
JAMESBJOHNSON
TRAILER TRASH KING.
 
JAMESBJOHNSON's Avatar
 
JAMESBJOHNSON is offline
Join Date: Aug 2007
Location: BAD SIDE OF TOWN
Posts: 46,465
Quote:
Originally Posted by Tio_Narratore View Post
Only to get rid of that crap bit of run-on awkwardness you offered as an "improvement."

You do know what unsolicited advice is worth, don't you, Jimbo?
Jacks fulla hot air, youre fulla shit. Besides, you have it coming for your anonymous bullshit on the story board.
__________________
Soft bigotry; its not what we like but its what we want.
  Reply With Quote

Old 03-20-2013, 02:46 PM   #33
Tio_Narratore
Everybody Party!
 
Tio_Narratore's Avatar
 
Tio_Narratore is offline
Join Date: Dec 2008
Location: North
Posts: 41,817
Quote:
Originally Posted by JAMESBJOHNSON View Post
Jacks fulla hot air, youre fulla shit.
Now, if only I could emulate your erudite style of pseudo-plainspeak, complete with lack of apostrophes...Shucks, I aint one ta cut the friggin musta in yer book, Jimbob.
__________________
Link to my stories...

http://www.literotica.com/stories/me...ge=submissions
  Reply With Quote

Old 03-20-2013, 03:04 PM   #34
Tio_Narratore
Everybody Party!
 
Tio_Narratore's Avatar
 
Tio_Narratore is offline
Join Date: Dec 2008
Location: North
Posts: 41,817
Quote:
Originally Posted by JAMESBJOHNSON View Post
Jacks fulla hot air, youre fulla shit. Besides, you have it coming for your anonymous bullshit on the story board.
Sorry, Jim, but I don't and won't post anything anonymously. I haven't even read any of your stories, to be honest, not even just the first paragraph. If someone has posted anonymously, it isn't me.
__________________
Link to my stories...

http://www.literotica.com/stories/me...ge=submissions
  Reply With Quote

Old 03-20-2013, 04:30 PM   #35
JackLuis
Literotica Guru
 
JackLuis's Avatar
 
JackLuis is offline
Join Date: Sep 2008
Location: La La Calif
Posts: 7,335
It's not surprising that people post on your stories anonymously, particularly after they've seen your reaction to reason.

Suck it up Jimmy, the world is a harsh mistress.
__________________
JackLuis-

Here My Stories

The Horny Springs Saga continues.

My New Best Friend, for our VE's


Fiction writers are just liars with typing skills.
  Reply With Quote

Old 03-20-2013, 05:20 PM   #36
JAMESBJOHNSON
TRAILER TRASH KING.
 
JAMESBJOHNSON's Avatar
 
JAMESBJOHNSON is offline
Join Date: Aug 2007
Location: BAD SIDE OF TOWN
Posts: 46,465
Quote:
Originally Posted by JackLuis View Post
It's not surprising that people post on your stories anonymously, particularly after they've seen your reaction to reason.

Suck it up Jimmy, the world is a harsh mistress.
Youve gone and made me cry, bully!
__________________
Soft bigotry; its not what we like but its what we want.
  Reply With Quote

Old 03-20-2013, 06:47 PM   #37
TxRad
Dirty Old Man
 
TxRad's Avatar
 
TxRad is offline
Join Date: Jan 2005
Location: Texas
Posts: 28,888
Quote:
Originally Posted by JAMESBJOHNSON View Post
Youve gone and made me cry, bully!
Like they say, Karma is a bitch.
__________________
New Story: Party Early 10/02/14 Romance Halloween Contest

New Story: Marley 08/21/14 Interracial Summer Lovin' Contest


Why yes, I am a dirty old man. Thanks for asking.

All Stories By TxRad
  Reply With Quote

Old 03-21-2013, 03:17 PM   #38
JackLuis
Literotica Guru
 
JackLuis's Avatar
 
JackLuis is offline
Join Date: Sep 2008
Location: La La Calif
Posts: 7,335
Quote:
Originally Posted by JAMESBJOHNSON View Post
Youve gone and made me cry, bully!
Well, you cast me as an asshole, so it's your fault.

Beside I doubt a Master & Commander would cry over the truth.
__________________
JackLuis-

Here My Stories

The Horny Springs Saga continues.

My New Best Friend, for our VE's


Fiction writers are just liars with typing skills.
  Reply With Quote

Old 03-21-2013, 04:42 PM   #39
JAMESBJOHNSON
TRAILER TRASH KING.
 
JAMESBJOHNSON's Avatar
 
JAMESBJOHNSON is offline
Join Date: Aug 2007
Location: BAD SIDE OF TOWN
Posts: 46,465
Quote:
Originally Posted by JackLuis View Post
Well, you cast me as an asshole, so it's your fault.

Beside I doubt a Master & Commander would cry over the truth.
I'm a modern sensitive Master & Commander with a man bag.
__________________
Soft bigotry; its not what we like but its what we want.
  Reply With Quote

Old 03-21-2013, 04:43 PM   #40
JAMESBJOHNSON
TRAILER TRASH KING.
 
JAMESBJOHNSON's Avatar
 
JAMESBJOHNSON is offline
Join Date: Aug 2007
Location: BAD SIDE OF TOWN
Posts: 46,465
Quote:
Originally Posted by TxRad View Post
Like they say, Karma is a bitch.
That bad? When did you start dating Karma?
__________________
Soft bigotry; its not what we like but its what we want.
  Reply With Quote

Old 03-21-2013, 04:44 PM   #41
JackLuis
Literotica Guru
 
JackLuis's Avatar
 
JackLuis is offline
Join Date: Sep 2008
Location: La La Calif
Posts: 7,335
Quote:
Originally Posted by JAMESBJOHNSON View Post
I'm a modern sensitive Master & Commander with a man bag.

Well as long as you are sensitive, can I go back to being Happy Jack now?
__________________
JackLuis-

Here My Stories

The Horny Springs Saga continues.

My New Best Friend, for our VE's


Fiction writers are just liars with typing skills.
  Reply With Quote
Reply


Thread Tools

Posting Rules
You may not post new threads
You may not post replies
You may not post attachments
You may not edit your posts

vB code is On
Smilies are On
[IMG] code is On
HTML code is Off
Forum Jump



All times are GMT -4. The time now is 09:16 PM.

Copyright 1998-2013 Literotica Online. Literotica is a registered trademark.