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Old 12-27-2012, 06:39 PM   #26
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Old 12-27-2012, 09:21 PM   #27
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Old 12-28-2012, 02:41 PM   #28
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Beautiful work, everyone. Really really love that last one, Angeline. Splendid.
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Old 12-28-2012, 04:01 PM   #29
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Beautiful work, everyone. Really really love that last one, Angeline. Splendid.
Thanks! I think I suck at haiku. I need to read more about the form to feel like I'm comfortable with it.

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Old 12-30-2012, 09:21 AM   #30
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Old 12-30-2012, 01:28 PM   #31
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Old 12-30-2012, 05:56 PM   #32
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House fills friends gather
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Old 12-31-2012, 06:17 AM   #33
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Old 12-31-2012, 10:29 AM   #34
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wrapping paper
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Old 12-31-2012, 11:59 PM   #35
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New Year’s Day
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Old 01-01-2013, 08:09 AM   #36
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like the ku-ness of this one, lots
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Old 01-31-2013, 05:23 AM   #37
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Old 01-31-2013, 08:36 PM   #38
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January night

Thirtyone have gone
Threefiftyfour next will come
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Old 02-03-2013, 11:50 AM   #39
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I know it's now February but still...

Late winter haiku.

New snow this morning.
Temperature starts to drop.
The groundhog just laughs.
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Old 02-05-2013, 12:07 PM   #40
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Acrostic haiku

Come, good little witch
Understand my dilemma
Magic can save me
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Old 02-09-2013, 03:21 PM   #41
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Before I post a haiku, western haikus are not haikus for the simple reason they aren't composed using Japanese script, which is why they always seem insubstantial and unfinished. Japanese haikus have an internal cross referencing, a sort of puzzle between what is said and the symbols used. My daughter studies Japanese and said, western haikus are like having the skeleton of a voluptuous model and having to imagine her, while Japanese haikus in Japanese script are the voluptuous model, flesh, breathing and all.

A crow
unfolds into flight
night falls
I think you should frighten your daughter
Japanese is a baad language, unlike German which is soo Uber

Serious - define this: Japanese script
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Old 02-10-2013, 02:33 PM   #42
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western haikus are like having the skeleton of a voluptuous model and having to imagine her, while Japanese haikus in Japanese script are the voluptuous model, flesh, breathing and all.

bog. i know you're out there.
get your daughter to explain this further

I like this, agree with her, esp the breathing part

now that should be scary to all parties concerned
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