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Old 12-29-2012, 12:15 PM   #2801
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I hope no one minds that I've been putting stories up quickly.

http://www.literotica.com/s/old-world-magic-ch-03

Chapter 3 of my modern day tale of fantasy magic and sex is up. It's short, only 1 literotica page, but I promise chapter 4 will be longer and sexier. But till then I would love feedback in the comments section (and of course your good ratings)

I'm also trying to decide if I should focus on this story thread or my other one, 90% true. So anyone who wants to leave feedback and let me know, it'd be appreciated. I also check here every few days so you can PM me if you like.
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Old 12-29-2012, 06:23 PM   #2802
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I have my first story up and three more in the queue! Please read and send feedback:

http://www.literotica.com/s/controlled-release
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Old 12-29-2012, 11:05 PM   #2803
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Feedback Wanted for Shemale Series

Hey, everyone. This is my first time posting in a thread on here. Hope I'm doing it right.
Anyways, here is a story I would like some more feedback on:
http://www.literotica.com/s/riding-i...shemales-ch-01
It started off as a single story, but people really seemed to enjoy it and I REALLY enjoyed writing it, so it became a series. I'm just looking for a bit more feedback so I can make future chapters more enjoyable. Here are the two following chapters that have already been posted if you're interested in those:
http://www.literotica.com/s/riding-i...shemales-ch-02
http://www.literotica.com/s/riding-i...shemales-ch-03
The story is about a college guy who get's a ride home from a very attractive girl. During their road trip, he discovers that she expects him to pay for the ride. As it turns out, the girl is, in fact, a very well endowed shemale. The "payment" is arranged on the shoulder of a dirt road in the middle of nowhere. The story is all about giving into your darkest desires, striking a balance between submission and domination, and finding pleasure in places you didn't expect. If you like the idea of a very feminine shemale with a giant cock, then you will love this series.
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Old 01-13-2013, 05:02 AM   #2804
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Sin of Vanity

The first chapter of my new story is up. If you enjoy Femdom, cuckolding and forced feminization this story should be just your cup of tea.

http://www.literotica.com/s/sin-of-vanity-ch-01
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Old 01-22-2013, 07:48 AM   #2805
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Adirondack Heatwave

My favorite Literotica author is JanetG. I've read all 3 of the novels in her Foursome For All series and every story she posts here. Yesterday she posted her first new story in a while, Adirondack Heatwave, Chapter 1. Sooo rich and detailed. Can't wait for Chapter 2.
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Old 01-22-2013, 12:54 PM   #2806
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New story posted

Hello all.

My new story is a Lesbian Sex story: A mature lesbian teacher rescues a younger college student, her good deed pays off in her office. Its a fun read, with a hint of anticipation and seduction.

http://www.literotica.com/s/the-good-deed-2

This is the first time I've tried the new story advertisement post, so if my link doesn't work you can search for it under "The Good Deed".

Favorite if you love it and please leave a comment...I loves me some comments...

Thanks!!

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Old 01-26-2013, 11:27 PM   #2807
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First time author, first submission, first acceptance

I am a first time author. This is my first submission. Nothing much, really, just a fantasy with a man and 2 women...but it is a Favorite Fantasy.,
It's short, just a brief glimpse, a little restraint, a toy, some anal...I hope you enjoy (if you don't well...)
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Old 01-31-2013, 10:30 AM   #2808
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Story Feedback

Good morning all!

I have two stories submitted and accepted here at Literotica. The second story titled Birthmark is the better if the two and I'd like to solicit some feedback if I may.

http://www.literotica.com/s/Birthmark

I'm looking for both story feed back and writing style comments, as I know I have some bad habits. I love to use the word "as" for example.

Have a great one!
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Old 02-03-2013, 11:07 AM   #2809
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A Long Time Cuming

A Long Time Cuming: A daughter secretly longs for her father only to find that her father has always longed for her. It's the story of their first night together and the realization that their love is more than either ever knew.

Comments and votes greatly appreciated on this taboo and also my first submission Favorite Fantasy.

I hope you enjoy them both. Read and vote and what ever else makes you feel good.
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Old 02-16-2013, 06:45 PM   #2810
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Please read and comment on my two new stories:

http://www.literotica.com/s/shameful-bliss

http://www.literotica.com/s/forbidden-fruit-39
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Old 02-26-2013, 05:14 AM   #2811
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Hello

Hello

Finally my first story was published (after a few delays) and I really liked if you could give me some feedback.

Riding with the storm, is a short story about two people, strangers, that get caught in a storm and the way they find to pass the time is to enjoy each other...

http://www.literotica.com/s/riding-with-the-storm
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Old 02-27-2013, 01:50 PM   #2812
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Chapter Nine... already :)

I've written a shorter than usual chapter in the saga of Jack, Fay and Tanya.

After the revelations in Chapter 8 - Tanya has some explaining to do.

http://www.literotica.com/s/how-it-all-began-ch-09

Hope you enjoy it...

All the best,
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Old 02-28-2013, 07:54 AM   #2813
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Against the Law, chapter 4

Hi there- The latest chapter in Against the Law is posted — The Date

http://www.literotica.com/s/against-the-law-ch-04

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Old 03-03-2013, 03:14 PM   #2814
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Diary Of A Rockstar

Diary Of A Rockstar: Chapter 1
(The Corruption of Paige Whitman)

An up-and-coming emo frontwoman seduces her manager in front of her boyfriend and ends up having her first threeway that ends with both men covering the young rockstar's face in cum...

http://www.literotica.com/s/diary-of-a-rockstar-ch-01
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Old 03-04-2013, 01:44 PM   #2815
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Now running on Literotica under the author name of sr71plt, the Gay Male novella Platres Conclave

Blessed with an absence of his high-powered deputy-ambassador wife, the recent purchase of a vintage Jaguar convertible, and a reservation in the room Daphne du Maurier occupied while she was writing Rebecca, bisexual American novelist Collin Stevens taps his inner carefree nature to take a week’s vacation from settling in to a tour at the American embassy. He escapes to the venerable British colonial-period mountain hotel, the Forest Park, in Pano Platres, Cyprus. Upon meeting charismatic, sensual, and seductive Greek Cypriot actor, Nico Christou, at the hotel, Collin is quickly taken up—literally—in the arms of a group of talented and randy artists, musicians, and writers conclaved in Platres for a week of creativity, during which the young American novelist finds himself celebrated in both art and casual sex. Much as he subsequently tries to write the whirlwind week off as a last fling before dutifully settling down as an embassy spouse, Collin finds he cannot escape the intensity and arousal of either the conclave experience or Nico Christou.





Coming to Literotica within a week under the author name of sr71plt, the Gay Male novel Homeward Bound

Young Charles Bairr discovers his sexuality in early twentieth-century Asheville and is soon providing extra services to boarding house residents to help his widowed mother get by.

What he really wants to do in life is write. His talent in play script writing brings him under the influence and control of the bigger-than-life flamboyant playwright and theater huckster Stanford Dane. But it is Charlie’s thinly disguised novels based on his experiences with men in Asheville boarding houses that open his way to New York and a career as a best-selling novelist.

The secret of Charlie’s father’s life and the pull of his own love affair with the mulatto lawyer Abraham Jackson bring Charlie back to Asheville, not to the expected resentment for his treatment of Asheville society in his novels but to acclaim. Both Charlie and Abe are wary of how the still very-Southern city of Asheville would react to their liaison, however, which leads them to live separate public lives while sharing the same bed in an isolated love nest.

Charlie’s past catches up with him and threatens the literary life he has fought so hard to attain, however, when he is pulled back under the fatal influence and control of his first mentor, Stanford Dane.

Inspired by the era and setting of American author Thomas Wolfe, Homeward Bound follows an imaginary young man obsessed with writing about his experience of the hidden life of his town.


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Old 03-12-2013, 03:44 PM   #2816
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Old 03-14-2013, 08:51 PM   #2817
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Smile Thanks to Lovecraft68

For the link to this thread.

As far as my future projects, my fiancé and I are now working on a joint project that puts the other projects I have going on hold. It's our story, with names changed of course. It should be up in a week or two after we get everything taken care of. We're going off of just memories here, but we do have very good memories. lol

Anyway, I hope everyone enjoys the ride with this one, as it will be quite a bit longer than my previous tales, and much more rooted in real life.
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Old 03-14-2013, 09:12 PM   #2818
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You're welcome!

And new from me another taboo tale of mother/son lust.

My Mother's a Porn Star.

http://www.literotica.com/s/my-mothers-a-porn-star
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Old 03-16-2013, 10:20 PM   #2819
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With all the feedback I've been receiving about the Colton Drake series of stories, I've decided to list them here in order that I've written them.

http://www.literotica.com/s/born-in-a-grave

http://www.literotica.com/s/night-is-falling

http://www.literotica.com/s/night-of-the-ripper

http://www.literotica.com/s/devilwind-bk-001

I also have one in the works called "Night Falls in Berlin" set during the latter days of the War in Europe during WWII and co-starring Marielle Tabra from "Night of the Ripper". I've received quite a few feedback emails about her and most want to see more. It will be finished after my fiancé and I finish our tale.

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Old 03-19-2013, 02:49 PM   #2820
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Hi all

After many gratifying visits to Literotica, I decided to try turning my hand to writing something .

Double Date ( http://www.literotica.com/s/double-date-5) is this attempt. I'd love feedback and advice, if anyone's willing.

Thank you all!

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Old 03-20-2013, 05:36 PM   #2821
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If you can, please read, rate and comment on this story.

http://www.literotica.com/s/hazy-nig...or-swift-ch-09

Dan and Taylor finally reunite.

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Old 03-20-2013, 11:50 PM   #2822
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First Story Submission

I have submitted my first story and would appreciate some feedback. So far the ratings have come back very favorably.

The story is in the Fetish section, and is a story about the main character discovering a hidden world of sex.

I have plans for it to continue, but would like to see if there is interest first.

http://www.literotica.com/s/blind-5
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Old 03-22-2013, 08:25 PM   #2823
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More "family fun" from yours truly

"Daddy Likes it Rough, and so do I!"

http://www.literotica.com/s/daddy-li...gh-and-so-do-i
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Old 03-27-2013, 11:41 PM   #2824
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Post FurtiveFantasy-Windows to the Soul, Part 1

A soft erotic story to lay the ground work for more to come...

http://furtivefantasy.wordpress.com/...he-soul-part-1
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Old 04-03-2013, 02:49 PM   #2825
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"Night Falls in Berlin" has been submitted in the Sci-Fi/Fantasy category. It should be published in a few days.

"From Friends to Lovers", which is the true account in summary of how my best friend became my fiancé, has been submitted in the Interracial Love category. It should be published the same day as "Night Falls in Berlin".

I hope everyone enjoys the ride.

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