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Old 10-26-2012, 07:37 PM   #2776
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Sabrina's education: Chapter 2

Sabrina's Education Chapter 2 is posted now under Novels and I hope I wrote enough to get my readers excited.

Sabrina moves into the mansion of her wealthy guardian and slowly adjusts with many bumps along the way.

http://www.literotica.com/s/sabrinas-education-ch-02

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Old 11-03-2012, 11:29 AM   #2777
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How it all began Ch. 06

http://www.literotica.com/s/how-it-all-began-ch-06

This is another chapter of the sexually flexible Jack and his adventures with his more assertive girlfriend, Fay.

In this chapter, an unexpected meeting in an awkward situation leads Fay into pushing their boundaries and pushing old experiences back to the fore.

Hope you enjoy it.

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Old 11-04-2012, 01:24 AM   #2778
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The Halloween story contest is over, but horror is forever, haunting us at our every turn. I am an enthusiast of horror. If you also enjoy the symbiosis of true horror and erotica then you absolutely have to give this story a look. It may be long, and it may have quite a bit of back story, but it definitely bleeds horror.
http://www.literotica.com/s/sideshow-sylvie

Please come and meet Sideshow Sylvie
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Old 11-04-2012, 08:52 AM   #2779
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I decided to take a shot at the shark infested waters of Loving Wives.

Its no secret that category is full of woman haters so my story is done with the woman as the vitim and paying hubby back in spades.

If you're going to walk into the hornets nest you may as well whack it with a big ass stick

http://www.literotica.com/s/how-do-we-look-baby
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The queen is the most powerful piece in the game of chess and frequently has to protect the rather weak king.

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Old 11-09-2012, 07:49 PM   #2780
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Thanks to everyone who's voted and offered feedback on my series "Getting To Know Amy Better." Part three has been posted at http://www.literotica.com/s/getting-...y-better-ch-03

I'd love to hear any comments or tips!
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Old 11-13-2012, 02:26 AM   #2781
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Finally the sequel to my Halloween contest story "Laine Goes to the Ball" is up.
If you liked the original I hope you will also like "After the Ball."
And if you never read the original it is a self-contained story, although reading the first story helps.

http://www.literotica.com/s/after-the-ball-1
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Old 11-15-2012, 04:40 AM   #2782
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My first story

Hello all. I am brand new here so I hope it's not rude for me to plug my first story. It is a Holiday Contest Entry in the "Group Sex" category. I hope you enjoy it. http://www.literotica.com/s/carols-christmas
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Old 11-15-2012, 09:05 PM   #2783
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Hello all.
The Fall of York, a sequel to The Doctor's Daughter is being submitted in about 7 parts. The first part just went up on the site. http://www.literotica.com/s/the-fall-of-york-ch-01-05
It's an erotic romance and is set during the War of 1812, when the Americans and the British (and Canadians!) fought over the future of Canada. Abigail and Lawrence are again the main characters and the story begins as the Americans invade York (Toronto).
The entire story is completed, and I'll try to submit a portion every two nights or so.
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Old 11-16-2012, 05:40 PM   #2784
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My Winter Contest story is up. It's a historical piece set in Elizabethan England.

http://www.literotica.com/s/twelfth-night-triumph
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Old 11-18-2012, 02:27 PM   #2785
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Seehofer Chronicles

Hi folks,

Just submitted my novella concerning Becca Sehoffer.

As I general writer, I thought I'd turn my hand to erotica. It isn't as easy as people might think!

It's retro based story, set in London in the 1960's.

It may a little slow getting off the ground for some folks!

I'd be greatful for any feed back from experienced wrtiters of the genre.

Thanks.
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Old 11-20-2012, 05:47 PM   #2786
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New story - "Instant Message"

Hi - something different for me. "Instant Message"

Hope you enjoy it. http://www.literotica.com/s/instant-message-1

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Old 11-21-2012, 01:32 AM   #2787
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She met him in her inbox.

My first story, comments welcome.

http://www.literotica.com/s/she-met-...er-inbox-ch-01

Literotica PM leads to first meeting.
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Old 11-22-2012, 03:57 AM   #2788
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Wink My latest story is up

This story is a sequel to my first and is also a contest entry. I hope everyone enjoys this one and much as I enjoyed writing it.

http://www.literotica.com/s/maid-on-boxing-day
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Old 11-22-2012, 01:28 PM   #2789
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Another chapter from me

Hi all,

Well, I've gone and done it and put a cuckold story in Loving Wives in the eighth installment of "How It All Began".

*gulp*

A tale of revenge, intrigue and explanation.

Hope you enjoy it.
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Old 11-24-2012, 06:00 PM   #2790
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The making of Chloé

Dear all,

thanks for all of those who have stumbled across my story already and left their kind feedback and votes!

As this is my very first entry - and actually first erotic story, I would very much value your feedback - be it in private or in the forums.

Here is the story: http://www.literotica.com/s/the-making-of-chloe In short, it is about a mad scientist who creates one women out of three in the search for a perfect woman.

kiss, Chloé.
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Old 11-25-2012, 10:24 AM   #2791
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Latest story - Shock Wave

'Shock Wave,' my second offering, is up in Lesbian Sex category.

The piece is an attempt to develop atmosphere, characters, and emotion in a BDSM setting. Most BDSM action is implied rather than shown. All comments, public and private, are welcome.

http://www.literotica.com/s/shock-wave

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Old 11-29-2012, 09:24 PM   #2792
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Here is my latest, and this one makes the story of Carol Carson's Christmas celebration a trilogy. http://www.literotica.com/s/carols-gifts
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Old 11-30-2012, 01:58 AM   #2793
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My second contest story is up. It's definitely a departure for me.

http://www.literotica.com/s/the-ornament
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Old 12-02-2012, 08:18 AM   #2794
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http://www.literotica.com/s/a-gift-for-her-father

Robyn returns home from college to find her family falling apart. After hearing her father's point of view, she feels sorry for him and decides to give him a very special Christmas gift
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Old 12-05-2012, 07:35 AM   #2795
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Here is the fifth chapter of a story about "Noella", an adventurous lady. I think I might have bored some readers with alot of build up story, somehow I felt i needed to do this before things got down and dirty.

Things are definitely getting hot now.....please give it a try and let me know what you think.


http://www.literotica.com/s/dressed-to-kill-ch-05

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Old 12-05-2012, 08:36 AM   #2796
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http://www.literotica.com/s/hazy-nig...or-swift-ch-08

In the latest chapter of the "Hazy Night with Taylor Swift" series, Taylor returns to the house of her lover Dan in hopes of surprising him. Instead, she meets his sister Carly.

I would love as much feedback as possible for this story and any other in the series.
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Old 12-14-2012, 11:47 AM   #2797
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Trying something new.

This is self edited, so please forgive any errors. My last story series stalled out when I got into a huge fight with my editor. Someone that I had been friends with for years, over the fact that she was nervous over her eventual involvement in the story.

That fight really squashed my muse for a bit, but I'm starting a new piece, pure fiction, that's a mix of magic and mind control.

Hope you enjoy:
http://www.literotica.com/s/old-world-magic-ch-01

Please feel free to leave comments.
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Old 12-14-2012, 09:43 PM   #2798
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My latest offering

My new story "Marcia Goes Back To School" is up in the Transsexuals & Crossdressers category.

http://www.literotica.com/s/marcia-goes-back-to-school
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Old 12-23-2012, 09:18 AM   #2799
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Chapter 3 of "90% true" is now up in the group sex catagory:
http://www.literotica.com/s/90-true-ch-03

"A fair-well orgy" deals with a FFM 3some from my youth.

http://www.literotica.com/s/90-true-ch-03


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Old 12-23-2012, 11:55 PM   #2800
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Brand new story in my Xanna series.

http://www.literotica.com/s/kris-has-a-breakthrough
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