LaRascasse
I dream, therefore I am
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First of all - Tx, I'm open to a good Black Friday deal for a shark suit if you've got one.
Now on to my situation - I'm at a crucial scene in my story. The wife cheated on her man and left him for a rich investment banker. The husband felt humiliated and bitter about it for days. The story has focused on the man since. He has drowned himself in his work and become a renowned doctor.
The scene is him in the ER, going through the patients, when he stumbles onto his ex-wife. She is brought in with a black eye and a bruise on her cheek.
How should the doctor react? I want to give a sense of forced professionalism, with a dose of Schadenfreude but underneath it all a memory of love, which makes him weak. Not weak enough to reconcile after what she did, but weak enough to cause heartburn.
So any ideas about the dialogue at this point? Should the demeanour be forcedly stoic where he treats her like a random patient, trying to prove to her he doesn't have any feelings left?
She should react with the obviously fake "slipped and fell in the bathroom" routine and drop hints like "You look better than I remember." and "It's good to see you doing so well", but never explicitly say sorry for what she did, even though she wants to.
Also, the irony that she left him, by all accounts a nice man, and married an abusive alcoholic should be subtext for this scene and not explicitly spoken.
Wow... that's a lot to try and compress into one scene. I'd be grateful if anybody has a few pointers on how to do it. Thanks in advance.
Now on to my situation - I'm at a crucial scene in my story. The wife cheated on her man and left him for a rich investment banker. The husband felt humiliated and bitter about it for days. The story has focused on the man since. He has drowned himself in his work and become a renowned doctor.
The scene is him in the ER, going through the patients, when he stumbles onto his ex-wife. She is brought in with a black eye and a bruise on her cheek.
How should the doctor react? I want to give a sense of forced professionalism, with a dose of Schadenfreude but underneath it all a memory of love, which makes him weak. Not weak enough to reconcile after what she did, but weak enough to cause heartburn.
So any ideas about the dialogue at this point? Should the demeanour be forcedly stoic where he treats her like a random patient, trying to prove to her he doesn't have any feelings left?
She should react with the obviously fake "slipped and fell in the bathroom" routine and drop hints like "You look better than I remember." and "It's good to see you doing so well", but never explicitly say sorry for what she did, even though she wants to.
Also, the irony that she left him, by all accounts a nice man, and married an abusive alcoholic should be subtext for this scene and not explicitly spoken.
Wow... that's a lot to try and compress into one scene. I'd be grateful if anybody has a few pointers on how to do it. Thanks in advance.