GuiltyPleasure
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This seems more like a cop-out than poetry.....a bit dumming down
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This seems more like a cop-out than poetry.....a bit dumming down
hey, bogusBig American kitsch-mobile gliding on a slow undulating highway
Auguste sent Camille mad because Claudel was a better sculptor than Rodin
A damp starburst on the sunbather’s gusset suggests she’s ready for plucking
NEWS FLASH: There are as many people alive today as have ever lived.
hey, bogus
i'm having trouble reconciling the imagery in that third A.S: starburst - i can see the radiating shape and link it with the ocean via 'starfish'. 'sunbather's gusset' doesn't have to mean bikini bottom, but that's where my mind goes with heat, sunbather, and damp. so we're talking primal as the ocean, the stuff of life (which can link back through starburst as in 'we're all made of stardust') and this then jars against 'plucking' which suggests ripe fruit (rather than chickens,lol).
oh. ok.To explain it would kill the surrealistic quality of it butters.
Nice meandering thoughts though.
stream runs low, clear; halfway up the bank a rusty trolley, draped in weed.
Wallace is a ghost strolling on my poem's horizon: what are the odds?
None, I'd say because he was an atheist, although I suspect you knew that which makes Walllace into something different than what is said. I'm not a big fan of short poetry, but if I'm correct, this says a lot more than what it says.
I was thinking of Wallace Stevens and his work as an insurance analyst, so the "odds" was also a play on that.
I don't know how well I'm succeeding but I find this American Sentence remarkable in its flexibility. I never liked writing haiku because I didn't feel an affinity for it, but this form has really grabbed my attention.
*Must NOT think Wallace and Gromit*