Metaphors and similes
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LoquiSordidaAdMe
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Hmm... I don't go in for a lot of elaborate phrase-turning in my writing. Not intentionally anyway. Let me see what I can find...
Ok, here's a simile that worked out pretty well. I don't know that it is particularly eloquent, but it certainly saved me a lot of time trying to translate what was happening in the narrator's head.
Ok, here's a simile that worked out pretty well. I don't know that it is particularly eloquent, but it certainly saved me a lot of time trying to translate what was happening in the narrator's head.
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"I've danced with the fuckup fairy more than once."
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One of my favorite similes, albeit a little over-the-top ('Cold Shock', the story it comes from, is way over-the-top) the description follows the two women felching ejaculate from the heroine's anus with a straw, followed by a cum-kiss:
When their lips met in a frantic, mauling kiss, cum flowed down their cheeks, dripping onto their tits as they undulated in the slippery cream, their slimy tongues thrashing like alligators wrestling in a milk pond.
When their lips met in a frantic, mauling kiss, cum flowed down their cheeks, dripping onto their tits as they undulated in the slippery cream, their slimy tongues thrashing like alligators wrestling in a milk pond.
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It's over the top, but creative. I like it.
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I like using similes for describing body parts. Much better than using numerical measurements:
"His cock was as long and hard as a pipe bomb and twice as dangerous."
"Her pubic hair was trimmed into a tidy patch, as neat and triangular as Lenin's beard." (spoken of a beautiful female Russian spy)
"Her breasts hung on her chest like two ripe cantaloupes, with just the perfect amount of sag. Her nipples pointed straight forward, as stiff and brown as two wine corks."
"His hips continued their relentless thrusting, vibrating like a paint mixer in a hardware store. His thumb flicked back and forth on her clit like a telegraph operator with epilepsy."
(These are all from my spy spoof, Femme Fatale).
"His cock was as long and hard as a pipe bomb and twice as dangerous."
"Her pubic hair was trimmed into a tidy patch, as neat and triangular as Lenin's beard." (spoken of a beautiful female Russian spy)
"Her breasts hung on her chest like two ripe cantaloupes, with just the perfect amount of sag. Her nipples pointed straight forward, as stiff and brown as two wine corks."
"His hips continued their relentless thrusting, vibrating like a paint mixer in a hardware store. His thumb flicked back and forth on her clit like a telegraph operator with epilepsy."
(These are all from my spy spoof, Femme Fatale).
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Excellent! Those must have been fun to write. Still chuckling.
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This is from a story I'm currently working on. The whole point of the story is that the language is supposed to be... odd... and this is my fun way of describing earbuds.
"Bees buzz in his ears—Music soothes the soul—but are silent in hers, as she becomes distracted by their cacophony."
If you get the reference here, a million points to you.
"Bees buzz in his ears—Music soothes the soul—but are silent in hers, as she becomes distracted by their cacophony."
If you get the reference here, a million points to you.
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One of my favourite Australianisms: "he couldn't pour beer out of a gumboot with instructions on the heel".
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Similar to, "He'd starve in restaurant, be celibate in a brothel."
the entire scene this quote comes from was hugely over written but i couldn't bear to delete a word of it
"Connie picked up the statement and held it up, like a discarded sock she'd found underneath one of the beds and handed back to Andrea. "Things might be different this time?" The incredulity in her voice was hard to ignore. "He's changed?"
