Ange1icflowers
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Well I just hit submit on my first poem submission. I'm nervous as hell. Why am I so nervous?
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It's different when you show your poetry. You have taken a very concentrated version of a story you wrote and put it out there for all to see. That's nerve wracking.Well I just hit submit on my first poem submission. I'm nervous as hell. Why am I so nervous?
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Ok so I see it but it doesn't look like it's "gone public" yet....
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Well anyhoo: Here's the poem:
What a shame you didn't take the time to really get to know me.
You only saw what you wanted to see.
But I'm so much more than one dimension one side
And there's so much that I'm just forced to hide.
I tried to show you bits and pieces of who I really am
but you pushed that aside like you didn't give a damn
you only saw the married mother of three
you didn't see the other facets of me
the things that make me truly unique
you see you only got a small peek
into the Windows of my soul
I wasn't going to let you see the whole
not until I was sure you weren't going to use me
but you turned around and then proved to me
that I was right to keep my guard up
because you were just stealing the kindness from my cup
I offered you my friendship with open mind and heart
No hidden agendas or plots from the start
You blocked me pushed me away
And left me hanging with so much left to say
But I've grown more since then I'm so much stronger
I find myself not even missing you any longer.
now I sit and think of what you missed and smile.
Because you have no clue. Not by a mile.
What a shame you didn't take the time to really get to know me.
You only saw what you wanted to see.
But I'm so much more than one dimension one side
And there's so much that I'm just forced to hide.
I tried to show you bits and pieces of who I really am
but you pushed that aside like you didn't give a damn
you only saw the married mother of three
you didn't see the other facets of me
the things that make me truly unique
you see you only got a small peek
into the Windows of my soul
I wasn't going to let you see the whole
not until I was sure you weren't going to use me
but you turned around and then proved to me
that I was right to keep my guard up
because you were just stealing the kindness from my cup
I offered you my friendship with open mind and heart
No hidden agendas or plots from the start
You blocked me pushed me away
And left me hanging with so much left to say
But I've grown more since then I'm so much stronger
I find myself not even missing you any longer.
now I sit and think of what you missed and smile.
Because you have no clue. Not by a mile.
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It takes a few days, so best to check daily if it's been accepted and posted.
Rhyming couplets I see, not many people around here write Forms but never fear I do at every opportunity!
Are you seeking critique or comments?
Rhyming couplets I see, not many people around here write Forms but never fear I do at every opportunity!
Are you seeking critique or comments?
Ange1icflowers
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Why not? LOL I wrote what came into my brain at the moment....I have "non rhyming" stuff too (Free form?). I just wrote what I felt. I was well...angry at the time lol.
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Yes and Yes. I also had another encounter with this person...and got have my "HA" moment where his jaw totally dropped and he told me i was looking "Damn good" I said "I know but thanks" and walked away. After all the shit he put me through (and I just wanted to be a friend mind you) it was AWESOME that I FINALLY got that moment.
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congrats
that's awesome.
you're nervous cause you want people to like what you've done, is my guess.
but the fact that you submitted is the great victory.
keep writing. just because.
that's awesome.
you're nervous cause you want people to like what you've done, is my guess.
but the fact that you submitted is the great victory.
keep writing. just because.
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Yes Facets.
fac·et
ˈfasət/Submit
noun
plural noun: facets
one side of something many-sided, especially of a cut gem.
synonyms: surface, face, side, plane
"the many facets of the gem"
a particular aspect or feature of something.
"participation by the laity in all facets of church life"
synonyms: aspect, feature, side, dimension, characteristic, detail, point, ingredient, strand; More
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To be true Couplets the lines should be of the same metre/length of course.
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Trust me
Trust me, I know the meaning of 'facets.' I was hoping you'd share a glimpse of your personality and passions
I've very aware of sarcasm as well . . .
Trust me, I know the meaning of 'facets.' I was hoping you'd share a glimpse of your personality and passions
I've very aware of sarcasm as well . . .
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Sorry I can't comment on it but Lit is having a brain fart and wants me to sign in to comment and then won't accept my password!
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