Icingsugar
peas o kayk
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I just yanked together another poem and submitted it, a rather intricate structured one (to come from for me, that is). I was just wondering, is this format new, or is there a name for it? And if not, can I call it... oh, I don't know... 'Bob'?
Here are the first four stanzas, gives you the idea. The stanzas rhymes in pairs, and evey stanza nicks the first line from the 3rd of the previous one. It was remarkably easy to write for a guy who tosses the cookies when trying a villanelle or suchlike.
Handshake, handover,
the same old agenda,
a lowride of commas
repeating in order.
A lowride of commas
with tidals of notion,
a call-response pattern
through distance and border.
A call-response pattern,
transmitter, receiver,
projector and canvas
in communication.
Projector and canvas
aligned with a signal,
a perfect clear image,
a photon vocation.
Yah, it's cryptic. But it continues...and hopfully makes sense in the end.
Here are the first four stanzas, gives you the idea. The stanzas rhymes in pairs, and evey stanza nicks the first line from the 3rd of the previous one. It was remarkably easy to write for a guy who tosses the cookies when trying a villanelle or suchlike.
Handshake, handover,
the same old agenda,
a lowride of commas
repeating in order.
A lowride of commas
with tidals of notion,
a call-response pattern
through distance and border.
A call-response pattern,
transmitter, receiver,
projector and canvas
in communication.
Projector and canvas
aligned with a signal,
a perfect clear image,
a photon vocation.
Yah, it's cryptic. But it continues...and hopfully makes sense in the end.