AlwaysHungry
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I am still trying to get my sea legs with respect to free verse. In this poem, I attempt to mix rhymed and metered verse with the free verse, to obtain a particular effect. I think this needs a fair amount of tweaking, so please hold forth:
To My Carnal Darling
In verse
In pixels
In the buttery wet flesh
In wantonness, you found the pathway home
To the warmest, darkest chambers of my heart
I have known you through the prism of my senses,
O companion on the skyways of the mind
where common thoughts and feelings may not tread.
In text I found your spirit, and it led me straight to where
that steaming, piquant part of you
tastes sweeter than a metaphor
I stand in awe, I stand erect
before your luscious intellect,
your words resound prodigiously
and light the fuse inside of me,
enlightened tongue and learned lips,
the hot persuasion of your hips
that make me frantic, make me frantic, make me
Long before we met, you knew
a love song is the only verse I'll write
and so
for love
you came
To My Carnal Darling
In verse
In pixels
In the buttery wet flesh
In wantonness, you found the pathway home
To the warmest, darkest chambers of my heart
I have known you through the prism of my senses,
O companion on the skyways of the mind
where common thoughts and feelings may not tread.
In text I found your spirit, and it led me straight to where
that steaming, piquant part of you
tastes sweeter than a metaphor
I stand in awe, I stand erect
before your luscious intellect,
your words resound prodigiously
and light the fuse inside of me,
enlightened tongue and learned lips,
the hot persuasion of your hips
that make me frantic, make me frantic, make me
Long before we met, you knew
a love song is the only verse I'll write
and so
for love
you came