Haiku reduction - breaking out of 17 syllable chains

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Building on a link that Butters provided in the New/Old Haiku thread. I propose this thread where we take one of your 17 syllable Haiku and reduce it to it's essentials. With permission, you can also apply your reductionist tendencies to another's Haiku.

Comments on edits welcomed.
 
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wind raised ripples
track sideways across the lake
foundation of now
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wind ripples
skate across water
this is now
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wind ripples
skate across water
Zen now
 
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