Auden James
Erotist
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(I hope I'm in the right section of this board to post my question. Anyway, I'd be grateful for any advice. Many thanks in advance!)
So, I want to post a story but cannot decide which title to chose. Hence, I thought, it'd be worth a try to take the public route for a change (from brooding by myself) and appeal to you guys and vote on which title would compel you the most to read the given story!
Plus, I'd like to know (since English isn't my 1st language) which one of the following four sentences you'd consider to be superior to the others in terms of intelligibility and style. (By the way, should the brackets be replaced by commas?)
I'd greatly appreciate your help in this matter.
Sincerely,
AJ
So, I want to post a story but cannot decide which title to chose. Hence, I thought, it'd be worth a try to take the public route for a change (from brooding by myself) and appeal to you guys and vote on which title would compel you the most to read the given story!
Plus, I'd like to know (since English isn't my 1st language) which one of the following four sentences you'd consider to be superior to the others in terms of intelligibility and style. (By the way, should the brackets be replaced by commas?)
- XX adjusted her glasses (which she wore purely for optical reasons) and took a deep breath.
- XX adjusted her glasses (which she wore solely as part of her tutor persona) and took a deep breath.
- XX adjusted her glasses (which she wore for no ophthalmological reason) and took a deep breath.
- XX adjusted her glasses (which she wore for decidedly unmedical reasons) and took a deep breath.
I'd greatly appreciate your help in this matter.
Sincerely,
AJ
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