Experimenting with audio light domination

I'd be grateful for any constructive feedback on this:

http://www.literotica.com/s/surprise-cum-slut

I've been exploring a more dominant side recently. Not heavy BDSM, more light power play, but I've no point of reference other than the feedback I get from listeners, which tends to be biased one way or the other.

If anyone has a spare 20 minutes to give this a listen and let me know where I could improve, either here or by PM, if be very grateful

Thanks in advance.

I like it.

I like that you're British like me - for some reason audio in American accents just feels wierd because I can't imagine the scene.

I didn't get a chance to finish this one, but the others on your profile are also good Keep going!