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Tom_Lym said:
Sweet. Do you have any stories you'd like reviewed?
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This is the one I am looking for reviews for.

http://www.amazon.com/dp/B006R24QPK

It's BDSM, but on the very rough side. It's part of a larger project that I tweaked to be a stand alone to get some general feedback.

Most of the story is the hardcore session, but it does have a back story as well.

Looking for a fair review, not smoke blown up my ass. I just ask that it be fair based on the material.
 
JAMESBJOHNSON said:
Broccoli.

I sampled some of the stories people want reviews for, and as a group they arent impressive. They remind me of an article I saw in the paper yesterday. A local guy got an award from his organic gardeners club for his 4 inch broccoli. The broccoli looks good, but 4 inches? So what! WAL-MART sells tons of 4 inch broccoli. Saturday I harvested one thats 10 inches in diameter, plus a 5 pound cabbage, and blueberries the size of dimes.
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Oh, so now it's My Broccoli Floret Is Bigger Than Your Broccoli Floret, huh? So it's come down to that?

Sure, it's easy to grow giant broccoli when you fertilize your garden with radioactive seaweed. It's a lot harder when you use porn-store sweepings and carnival vomit, but the results are worth it.


JAMESBJOHNSON said:
So what! is whats missing from most LIT stories.

Like...you go to prison and get cornered in the shower, the leader of the pack wants some of your ass...but cant get it up....and the whole world is watching.

Or...you get a rare invitation to a private reception with your favorite author, spend the day getting your shit together for the occasion, get lost in a rainstorm on the way, and end up in a ditch in the middle of nowhere at night. You spy a dim light far away, and slog thru the rain and mud towards it. Its a rustic sort of lodge out in the forest. You rap on the door, and look like a wet, muddy dog when your favorite author opens the door.
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Unfortunately those seaweed isotopes go straight to your brain, and you starting writing posts like this.
 
dr_mabeuse said:
Oh, so now it's My Broccoli Floret Is Bigger Than Your Broccoli Floret, huh? So it's come down to that?

Sure, it's easy to grow giant broccoli when you fertilize your garden with radioactive seaweed. It's a lot harder when you use porn-store sweepings and carnival vomit, but the results are worth it.




Unfortunately those seaweed isotopes go straight to your brain, and you starting writing posts like this.
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Youre jealous I have better ideas than you.
 
dr_mabeuse said:
Oh, so now it's My Broccoli Floret Is Bigger Than Your Broccoli Floret, huh? So it's come down to that?

Sure, it's easy to grow giant broccoli when you fertilize your garden with radioactive seaweed. It's a lot harder when you use porn-store sweepings and carnival vomit, but the results are worth it.




Unfortunately those seaweed isotopes go straight to your brain, and you starting writing posts like this.
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Actually carnival vomit is a fascinating image and possibly a useful metaphor (as in your usage). But really just, Hi. :D
 
Boxlicker101 said:
What I am looking for are honest reviews of my stories as stroke stories. I believe that, within those limits, they are good, and I hope to make a few bucks off them.

I have participated in Story Discussion, and it is very good for somebody who wants to write great works of erotic literature, but that is not my goal. I believe I can do that too, but that is not why I am writing on Literotica and what I am trying to sell.
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Well, I understand what you're saying. You want reviews, not critiques. You're already satisfied with the quality of your work. You just want to hear whether other people are as well.

I'm going to recuse myself from this reviewing thing though, because I can't review without giving reasons why I liked or didn't like something, and that gets into critique territory.

But as far as the SDC goes, I've always felt that you can't critique a piece of writing unless you know upfront just what the author was trying to do, and the author needs to tell you that when he presents the piece. Maybe they were trying to write great literature, or maybe they were trying to write basic stroke, or maybe they intended for their story to be vague and hard to understand. But you can't judge how close someone gets to their target unless you know what they were aiming at.
 
Angeline said:
Actually carnival vomit is a fascinating image and possibly a useful metaphor (as in your usage). But really just, Hi. :D
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There's my girl! :heart:

Hey, Lovely! I thought you'd given up slumming over here with us incorrigible fic-dicks!

It's like seeing a :rose: in a puddle of corndog barf in the weeds behind the tilt-a-whirl... :D
 
dr_mabeuse said:
There's my girl! :heart:

Hey, Lovely! I thought you'd given up slumming over here with us incorrigible fic-dicks!

It's like seeing a :rose: in a puddle of corndog barf in the weeds behind the tilt-a-whirl... :D
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I have a friend who puked on a tilt-a-whirl and it got on everybody but him. Centrifugal force, you know. He had to get off that ride and run, you can imagine.

But yeah, I'm like a rose in Spanish Harlem. :D I shall come visit you soon at that other place. I'm plotzingly proud of your award! I'm kvelling!

:kiss:
 
dr_mabeuse said:
I'm going to recuse myself from this reviewing thing though, because I can't review without giving reasons why I liked or didn't like something, and that gets into critique territory.
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Note that up the line the OP suggested that the favorable reviews could be posted to distributor sites and those that weren't could just be posted here or PM'd. I think you're being presumptive and overly harsh in what you're posting to this thread.

And, no, reviewers don't usually quiz the author on what he/she intended before they write their reviews. They just have to wing it like everyone else, and if they see what is written as something different from what the author saw when she/he wrote it, that's acceptable too.
 
Angeline said:
I have a friend who puked on a tilt-a-whirl and it got on everybody but him. Centrifugal force, you know. He had to get off that ride and run, you can imagine.

But yeah, I'm like a rose in Spanish Harlem. :D I shall come visit you soon at that other place. I'm plotzingly proud of your award! I'm kvelling!

:kiss:
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In Boy Scouts I peed in a pickle jar, then tossed it into the bushes; unfortunately the jar fell into some guys' stew pot.
 
In-depth review of "The Breaking of Allison".

What I liked about it;
  • I liked how you explored the idea of hypocrisy - that Allison dished it out but couldn't take it and how Mark kept referring to her as a poser.
  • Most of the story was really, really good and I think you should definitely write a sequel at some point (though you shouldn't if that wasn't the purpose of the story) because wtf happened to Alex Warner. Was Mark recording the session? Do all initiates get recorded?
  • I liked how you remarked on the games she would play with her own pets and how Mark was turning them around on her (like the first insult, etc).
  • I liked the hallucination of the rape (okay that sounds bad but you know what I mean) because I was like "oh shit son, this is about to get serious" before you pulled the M. Night Shamlamamamlamalama.
  • I loved that she tricked Mark into coming halfway through the story. Seemed like her poor eyeball would burn so much more though.
Basically, on the whole I really liked the story (which is why I personally give it a pretty high rating).

The stuff I feel could use work (please stop reading if not in mood for hopefully helpful criticism)

  • "Then he fucked the shit out of me" - I really think you should only use this once (I believe you used it twice in total) as it sort of marks the climax of the action of the story. I think the second one could be removed outright and the sex scene would be just as good.
  • "!!!" multiple exclamation marks kill me. I was trying to think of how to best explain my dislike of these. I realized multiple question marks would look ridiculous "what was the question??". Exclamation marks should be lonely individuals, I think, like most of those heavy hitters. Granted, this is a little nit-picky, but I genuinely think it would improve the story to have them removed.
  • I think you should have taken more time describing the anal part, considering that sort of represented the breaking of Allison's will. Plus, a giant cock in the ass would probably take some work to get in (speaking from a theoretical perspective, no idea if that's true).
  • How many times can that goddamn nipple clamp be turned. Hahaha, sorry - this may be another stupid small point, but the way it was described I kept picturing Mark turning those knobs a full circle every time, though I know the intention was that he just kept tweaking them a little. Right?
 
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