My first story.

Have a read of my first story please and tell me what you think. I know there was a lot of grammer issues, but I hope the story was a little exciting?!

http://www.literotica.com/s/my-born-again-christian-wife

Well, I read your story, yes there were spelling and grammer errors. I would work on that, distracts from the story sometimes. The storyline was not bad, the idea of it, it needs some work to make more believable. I prefer stories that are at least believable. You could have continued the story after she woke from her hangover and made it get more interesting. I think you did ok for a first time writer. Work on professionalism, including the spelling and grammer and fill in some gaps to spice the story up.
 
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