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[Hang0911]

Hi, as the topic said I just joined here the other day. I used to write all the time when I was much younger but it left me somehow. I'm recently trying to re-discover it, this just kind of can to me one night. I really don't know the differences or rules about poetry, I just write what I feel. Anyway, comments appreciated

Does anyone know the way
to get through this life
to get through this day
to open my heart
to stop my mind
to keep me seeking
so maybe I'll find
what I need
to make me whole.
to end my searching
to soothe my soul...
this life is so short
will I have the time,
to find what I need
to silence my mind.

 

[njoyjade]

Hello from a fellow Newbie

]Hi, as the topic said I just joined here the other day. I used to write all the time when I was much younger but it left me somehow. I'm recently trying to re-discover it, this just kind of can to me one night. I really don't know the differences or rules about poetry, I just write what I feel. Anyway, comments appreciated

Welcome,
To para-phrase the good witch from The Wizard of Oz, "You always had it, it never left"

 

[UnderYourSpell]

I do think you have too many 'to's' in there if it's any help

i.e

Does anyone know the way
to get through this life, this day
open my heart, stop my mind
keep me seeking?
Maybe I'll find what I need
to make me whole
end my searching,
soothe my soul.
Life is so short so
will I find what I need
to silence my mind?

 

[Angeline]

I do think you have too many 'to's' in there if it's any help

i.e

Does anyone know the way
to get through this life, this day
open my heart, stop my mind
keep me seeking?
Maybe I'll find what I need
to mak?e me whole
end my searching,
soothe my soul.
Life is so short so
will I find what I need
to silence my mind

That's better and I'd add some line shifts and breaks and punctuation. Maybe:

Does anyone know the way
to get through this life, this day,
open my heart, stop my mind,
keep me seeking?

Maybe I'll find
what I need to make me
whole, end my searching,
soothe my soul.

Life is so short.

Will I find what I need
to silence my mind?

Overall Hang0911 if you keep writing and reading and thinking about how to best present what you want to say, you will not only get your groove back, you'll get even better!